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Please critique my new song
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It's called "Where's my World?"

There are some wrong chords that I hit here and there, and I was too lazy to re-record the whole thing to fix it

Please let me hear any critiques you might have

Song is found here:
Where's My World?


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:musicnote:Music doesn't stop at the ears when it begins at the heart.:musicnote:


:psychsplit:"Sit in reverie and watch the changing color of the waves that break upon the idle seashore of the mind."
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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: boxcarguy07]
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reminded me a little of cat stevens

I like it:thumbup:
the sound of the clean guitar is nice, but the lead guitar could have a nicer sound. singing fits well too (although the low frequencies resonate a little), nice double voicing here and there, which in their turn reminded me of fleetwood mac

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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: boxcarguy07]
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i need some heroin! good song!!

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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: hazey]
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thanks you guys!

stefan, i'll work on another sound for the lead guitar... now that you point it out, it does sound a bit "crunchy"

Also, I didn't notice the resonance of the low frequencies on my headphones, but when I plugged in my speakers I could definitely tell, so thanks for pointing that out too!
I'll get to work on those for next time.


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:musicnote:Music doesn't stop at the ears when it begins at the heart.:musicnote:


:psychsplit:"Sit in reverie and watch the changing color of the waves that break upon the idle seashore of the mind."
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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: boxcarguy07]
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I like it! I'm assuming you multi-tracked this yourself, so kudos :smile: I like to do the same. I like to see music from the soul.

Perhaps we can collaborate one day on a piece? :biggrin:

I warn you though, my style is a little different than yours. I like to add touches of funk, metal, grunge, even some punk influence in my playing. But a fusion of your styles and mine could be awesome, who knows?

I'm always looking for a fellow musician to build something with, especially since I've seen people from around the world collaborate thanks to the almighty Internet. I can tell by this song you're skills are capable of such a project.

Tell me what you think. (some of my songs are posted in the forum, if you're interested)


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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: manyc]
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Thanks all!
Stefan, I remixed it a little bit and fixed (mostly) the problems with the low-end. Sounds better now IMO.

manyc, I'll take a listen to some of your stuff. Your idea sounds like it could be fun!


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:musicnote:Music doesn't stop at the ears when it begins at the heart.:musicnote:


:psychsplit:"Sit in reverie and watch the changing color of the waves that break upon the idle seashore of the mind."
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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: boxcarguy07]
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Sounds pretty good overall... the lead vocals are pretty rad

although,
1. I dont think the backup vocals really work ... they seem to come out of no where... seemingly at random

2.There seem to be some timing issues, particularly in the beginning. Moreover, the track on a whole doesn't really seem to flow that well, meaning that changes seem quite abrupt and unexpected ... if thats what you're going for, rock on - particularly at the 2 minute mark around the solo time.

3. I would experiment with some different effects for the rhythm guitar... I dont dig the sound of the current effects - sounds way too thick and grating to the point of being almost annoying. Plus I might think about changing up the rhythm guitar at least somewhat... it gets too repetitius imo

4. Im guessing around the 420 and 127 mark are messups?

Cool solos btw


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"plus they atually think jambands are good or sumthing, so they clearly know absolutely nothing about music, clearly lol" -Bassfreak

Edited by All We Perceive (02/13/08 09:08 PM)

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Re: Please critique my new song [Re: All We Perceive]
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Thanks for your critique All We Perceive!
Yeah, those parts are messups, and I messed up my timing in the beginning as well.

As far as the abrupt changes, that was kind of intended... actually, there would be even more abruptness if I had access to a drum set that I could record myself playing... because right now the drums are just a loop that I recorded from my guitar pedal.

I hear what you're saying about the backup vocals. I think they work better in some places than others.


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:psychsplit:"Sit in reverie and watch the changing color of the waves that break upon the idle seashore of the mind."
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