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OfflineConscious_Shadow
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Registered: 08/05/02
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some poems.....
    #959865 - 10/14/02 03:50 PM (14 years, 10 months ago)

I usually don't share my poems often, so I thought I'd get alot of them out here...



there are sights of wishful fountains,
pools of water that never ripple,
next to green fields full of flowers
flowers that are never wilted

it pulls the eyes of many witnesses
they can't see that they have witnessed nothing
they see the beauty but it tells them nothing
a simple picture that they will not see again

without night there is no day
no contrast between dark and light
unseen pictures behind this reality
come out and show us what not to believe

and as I'm lying under this darkest night
I see where the sun will be tomorrow
filling us with warmth and happiness
but now stars in faraway places
show me what I could be feeling
something that seems so far from me

I've got to turn inside
away from that which
shows me nothing
and I may find there
what I've been searching for
hiding behind my delusive shadow

and as I'm crawling through this tunnel
the light at the end seems so welcoming
but is not bright as the sun behind me,
an unreachable star in the distance
but I cannot turn back, even for a glimpse
one sight, and the warmth will pull me out again

the closer I come, the more I see
that I've never imagined to see
fragments of feelings that I don't yet understand
surpassing the boundaries which I had held before

as I reach this sheltered sea of warmth
a flood of light hits me, knocks me back
such is something that will never be seen
the true divinity hidden inside all

and now I lay joyful staring at the sun
it's no lie, but a vision of hope
showing us what we each hold
connecting us all together



here's another one...


a moment that lasts forever
a drop of rain falling from the sky.
a small puddle on the ground
a gathering of old souls,
talking softly about times they've had
waiting for another one
watching old friends trickle by
a nod or two, a wink, a smile
or just that optimistic stare




another...

I feel, no need to see
I've seen, everything I need
don't ask, don't even talk to me
I'll wait, wait to be free

and I'll come out
some days to see the light
you know that sun's really bright
some days I'll feel the breeze
and listen to birds, singing in the trees

but for now I'm staying here
it's too dark to see anything,
that I don't want to
and it's easier to think about things
when I'm dreaming of things that aren't true

you can, talk to me
and I'll try, to listen too
even if, I've heard it before
I'd hear, I'd hear it some more

I want to know
what I'm feeling here
but I'm so confused
I can't explain it to myself
and I can't complain to anyone else
I sit here wondering what it is
that makes me feel like this

I'll sing, songs of the birds
while I'm, searching for words
but I really doubt,
that anything will come out

I hope, that I can sleep some nights
maybe I'll dream, some pleasant sights
I wish, that the days will end
and the light will get blown away, by the wind
because it's easier to deal with illusions
than it is with my sober confusions
hovering over me, blinding my reason
depressed, I go past the distant horizon
I don't see it, but I make it what I like
the radiant moonlight, the sparkling stars
so beautiful when it's in my head
so disappointing when it's not what they said
I'll try to think of other things
things I used to laugh about
things that used to make me cry
nothing seems to work, it's all just a lie
oh well, another day, waiting for the sunset
time to go to sleep again, away from all the real
sit back, relax, this is no time to think of worries
no time, no hurries
I'll wait for whatever may come
I'll wait for whatever may not
there's no time, there's no more lies
no control, no more misunderstanding
no more laughs, no more cries
no more smiles, no more surprise
what may come, is what will not
I'll sit here and think of things
but the thoughts never come to me
just hollow sounds, drifting in my head
the whole world is gone, a desert in my mind
nothing bothers, nothing tries
nothing
nothing
no crickets chirping
no starlight shining
all the sand is blowing away
the gentle wind, trying not to bother anyone
I'll stay a bit more, I want to see what happens
maybe one last star will shoot in the sky
but my hopes aren't high
you see, I can't even see the sky
it's not there, it never was
what you saw is what everyone does
don't you wish you could have touched it
tasted a bit of moonlight, trickling down your tongue
I do
what happened to me?
am I still here?
I don't care anymore
I don't think I have ever understood
maybe it will come to me
but then it wont even matter
it wont mean anything now
there's no use anymore
no more light




...........


I feel the poison they're feeding me
the shroud of my ambition
the blistering of my conscience.

It's sad to see it all
falling away in front of me
in front of everyone else.

I'm listening to the cries of nothingness
watching as it passes me by
feeling it seeping in.

I try to walk to withered windows
but when I do nothing is there
just a plain wall with a blank stare.

The pain I feel is in everything
the thoughtless thoughts
are draining my mind.

All I see is crying clouds
the toneless feelings
are draining my soul.


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I come upon an ocean
in some diametric desert
but don't find myself dancing
upon the question why?



I find the somber sailing
within an unknown sky


where has my good friend gone?
who is left to take his place?

I've found no soil
but that of the departed
I've found no place to start my studies
I've found no one to find my tears

I can trust nothing except
my own faults


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it was so beautiful up there
I never wanted to come down
but I had to come down

I had to feel the sun before I saw the sunset
to feel my pain before I shed my tears

I learned to feel the heat without touching the flame
watching the wind move under my shoulders
feeling my mind rising above

I see the light at the end of the tunnel
and I know it's still waiting for me

it's so beautiful down here



_______________________



And the sun reflects off your face
night sky moon with satin lace
I wish that you could understand
a moment's gone, a moment stands
you'll find no pictures on the wall
no one to talk, no one to call
your own eyes will show the way
take a walk, no need to stay

you can leave without leaving me
and I'll make sure the walls are clean

a space beyond yesterday
I'll see it when it comes my way
I've been waiting for it to come to me
to show itself and set me, free

no way to know facing the floor
all I see is old footprints from the door
I came here to get away
but now I'm here, and I'll have to stay

I'll see you when I see myself
I know it's sad but you'll have to wait

butterflies are in their wombs
and a dead moth lies in my room

I'll see you when I see myself






well I'm sure no one took the time to read all that crap, but I don't care. and thanks if you read any of it.



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Finally the punk rockers are taking acid.


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OfflineGrowingVines
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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #961055 - 10/14/02 10:59 PM (14 years, 10 months ago)

I like them all, very good......bravo =)


peace out my brothers, for everyone has a bit of insanity in them


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Peace out my brothers, for everyone has a bit of insanity in them


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OfflineTeKHeAD009
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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #961279 - 10/15/02 12:03 AM (14 years, 10 months ago)

I like 'em!

You're very able to describe many of the ways I feel sometimes. This is what I tried to do with my thing I just wrote.... budit jus ended up cute. LoL.

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I think this has to be the best fourm. Everyone sharing their own creative stuff. Even if nobody looks at my pictures, my poetry - even if nobody looks at yours. Its been put out here for somebody to see. By putting it out in the open for people to see, for me personally, its a big relief - a way of alleviating emotional crap that I've been constipated with. By viewing others works of art and writing - I'm able to expand my ways of creative expression.

Keep posting them as they come if you can.


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Offlinemr_kite
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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #962322 - 10/15/02 07:46 AM (14 years, 10 months ago)

That's some of the best stuff I've read here. I like the way that some of them have a sort of underlying hypnotic rhythm... if that doesn't sound too pretentious. But they do feel like they've got rhythm in them; it makes them flow.


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let yourself be silently drawn by the stronger pull of what you really love


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OfflineConscious_Shadow
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Re: some poems..... [Re: mr_kite]
    #963703 - 10/15/02 07:20 PM (14 years, 10 months ago)

Thanks for all the replies. sometimes I try to write the poems with rhythm...sometimes it just comes out that way, sometimes it doesn't. I've been wanting to put some of my stuff to music, I play guitar and write a lot of stuff with that...but I can't sing at all, so it's really hard to put my writing to music.


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OfflineConscious_Shadow
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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #975363 - 10/19/02 09:15 PM (14 years, 9 months ago)

here's another I just wrote



pulls the trigger and looks away
what a shame he doesn't eat his prey
everyone else is feasting happily
but he says there were none more beautiful than she

a man flies miles and miles away on wings
while some can't begin to imagine such things
as they're staring into the waters
and he's staring into the sun

they can't feel the sand
as they walk barefoot on the beach
and he's walking on water
blown away by the wind

some gunman on the hill
looking for some savior to kill
it brings them peace
living alone without worries

like walking alone at dusk
with a clouded sky above
a deserted and empty night
pulling thoughts out of the darkness

fighting his shadows under the moon
thinking they will give up soon
one last kick in the dust and he's down
laying like a corpse gazing into the ground

he cradles this pain like a tree does a leaf
he lets it go slowly
and watches it walk out the door
waiting for it to return again
because it always does
no matter how far he runs
he can't learn to hold on
he can't stop to understand




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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #980111 - 10/21/02 04:48 PM (14 years, 9 months ago)

I like it, dont get me wrong, but care to explain a little on what its about. I've got a few ideas, but across the board. I dont like to believe writing is something its not.


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OfflineConscious_Shadow
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Re: some poems..... [Re: TeKHeAD009]
    #980141 - 10/21/02 04:57 PM (14 years, 9 months ago)

it's art, it's meant to be interpreted. and I'd like to hear what you got out of it.


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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #980901 - 10/21/02 10:21 PM (14 years, 9 months ago)

The first and last parts as well as the center sound kind of like a - I dont know how to describe it - someone who hurts for fun or to boost their own self esteem: a "school bully" if you will. Or perhaps a cycling abusive relationship.

The 2 parts after the first, and 2 parts after the middle are such skewed comparatives (?) to what your talking about I dont understand them.

Are you trying to show a contrast in the 2nd paragraph?
I dont get anything out of paragraph 3.
I'm not sure about 5.
Paragraph 6 seems to be about inner turmoil or trying to stop something inside yourself. ~shrug~

I'm not very good at this poetry thing - but I'll try  :crazy:. I dont like to say what writing is about because many times what I think is so totally different from what it really is. Am I completely off, or a little close? 


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OfflineConscious_Shadow
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Re: some poems..... [Re: Conscious_Shadow]
    #1000309 - 10/28/02 04:50 PM (14 years, 9 months ago)

sometimes I'd like to find a way
to get these cryptic mimes out of my head
sometimes I'd like to throw a flower to the birds
and watch them carry it away

as clouds unleash their thunder
and shine bright lightening skies
I listen to the music playing inside my head
thinking it won't be long before it's dead

I scribble thoughts into the wind
so I can watch them blow away
then I'll find a place to lie down
and wait for bright new eyes to shine my way


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