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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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im a wolf
#7760646 - 12/14/07 11:48 PM (16 years, 1 month ago) |
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there is nothing more intoxicating than .....
to be able to stare a man in the eyes from 10 metres away and not blink
he keeps his gaze for a few seconds.. he puts his head down and to the right.. he's been dominated
you walk up to the couple waiting for a bus outside the station
"you got a light?"
"yeah i got a light"
you take the light and sprinkle some crack in a pipe
"hope this doesnt offend you guys"
"hey, dont i know you"
"ya, i know you. you're name's kelly"
you hit the pipe, ssssttt whooohh
"you can keep the light.. i dont need it"
the couple are sharing a cigarette
"you wanna know something funny, kelly?"
"what's that?"
"i was there when my parents got murdered"
"..."
"i was there. i had to clean up the mess"
"why are you telling me this?"
you take 5 more puffs of the crack pipe
"im telling you... because i know you miss your mom.. call her, kelly"
kelly nods her head
the bus arrives
you take one more puff of the crack pipe
"someone's gonna die tonight. it ain't me, but someone's gonna die. someone's gonna have to die tonight. yep. someone's gonna die"
you laugh
nothing matters but getting a knife. whatever happens from there is something to figure out when the knife is in hand.
stay tuned for part 2
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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in the bus you jump from bar to bar, like a ferocious monkey
an old woman, about 60 year old walks on to the bus
"OOPS, SORRY" you shout in her ear as you elbow her in the ribs
"HEY! Hands off in this bus" the bus driver tells you
"Is this the society we live in? Hands off?"
"As long as I'm driving this bus, those are the rules"
"Well I don't play by your rules, chief. This bus runs under my jurisdiction now"
You thrust your hand out and choke the 60 year old woman to death. she spits at you but you are safe. it dribbles down her chin.
you swing a backpack from your back to your front, you take a wrench out of the large pocket
"IT'S FRIDAY NIGHT. AND IM NOT PLAYING"
you hit the bus driver over the head with the wrench, the bus starts veering to the left but you quickly quick the driver out of his seat and take the wheel
you dial a number on your cell phone. it's your mother on the other line
"HEY MOOOOOM"
"grant?"
"ITS YOUR SON GRAAANT. GUESS WHAT MOOOM"
"what's going on grant?"
"YOUR SON KILLED A MAN TONIGHT, MOM! YOUR SON KILLED A MAN"
you, grant, hit the breaks on the bus. you start panting heavily and take out a 18mm out of your belt.
"i said someones gonna die tonight, but it's not me. but this time... this time, it's me"
you grant shoot yourself to death
the last image in grant's mind was a 10 year old boy
his last word was a curse against this boy
his last thought was "i hope i did enough"
grant
grant
my-my-mystery grant
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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grant, always a mystery
by the age of 4, grant michigan knew he would grow up to be a pedophile and a murderer
that grin.. he had a permanent evil grin on his face. his eyes were casters of doubt, leaking fear and fury
his words leaked fear, his actions leaked fear. his mind leaked fear. his world leaked fear
there was now an army of 40 year old white men listening to underground hip hop and free running
they had to get good at free running, dont ask them why though
because who knows, it was just the thing to do
and many have died for us to get here
grant had a brother, john
john liked spreading butter on his body
john buried himself with his brother grant
what a bunch of fags dont you think?
if the words are shit then i am shitting on you
plop
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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anthony and darlene
two people
they lived 60 and 70 years respectively
they got in fights often, and were always trying to outdo the neighbors
anthony and darlene
a couple of characters
i cut them in the jugular
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Cameron
Too Many Words



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warning: spooky material above 
that was inspiring
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TheCow
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eh you aren't a good writer
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Icelander
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stay tuned for part 2
no thanks. Try the PUB.
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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i was very drunk when i wrote this
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Icelander
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So? Are you saying you can't handle alcohol?
-------------------- "Don't believe everything you think". -Anom. " All that lives was born to die"-Anom. With much wisdom comes much sorrow, The more knowledge, the more grief. Ecclesiastes circa 350 BC
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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not at all, i think i wrote excellently. my writing style reminds me of chuck palaniuk
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Icelander
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Then why the "I was drunk" comment. Does that add to your charm as a writer?
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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just some good old bravado
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Justice_Fish
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I liked that.
I enjoyed this.
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glad to hear this was for a book, lol.
i was skimming it thinking you did this stuff with people and I was like, you should be nominated for queef of the year.
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OrgoneConclusion
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When you drink; don't type! That's The Law.
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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bump
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SavageSporeBeast
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always get messed up and write.
just look at where it got hunter thompson.
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Cameron
Too Many Words



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Re: im a wolf [Re: Cameron]
#9539942 - 01/03/09 08:13 PM (15 years, 28 days ago) |
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C.M. Mann
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Now that was funny.
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OrgoneConclusion
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Quote:
im a wolf
I like anthropy.
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figmentfragment
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Hm...the title had me curious, the beginning had me annoyed, then for some odd reason I continued reading regardless...the style of narration almost made it compulsive.
Perhaps it would have been better suited for the pub, but then again I am sure a lot of "pubbers" have real issues with literacy.
I think I actually enjoyed it.
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OrgoneConclusion
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This was one of those rare instances where the movie was better than the book.
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yes


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heh.. Well if you must drink.. you must write I hope it isnt inappropriate to barge in with this. I read your story and it reminded of something i wrote a long time ago. I cant really remember.. but from reading again after a while .. perhaps i was drunk too 
- Maybe? -
There once was a man with a gun. He never had one before and did not know how to use it. It was rough at the handle.. then smooth , shimmering under light giving off little reflections as if it were smiling. As if it were meant to do no harm. He saw it work in movies .. always the same way and he hoped to be the bearer now. Giving thrills .. posing a threat that made people hold hands and cry !! But... he didnt know why .. or who to put in this action packed drama. "Shooting at trees just wouldnt do it" , he thought. What would have to be played out so this piece of metal would find its purpose ? Murder !?!?? "No... thats too much", he said .. "And i really mean no wrong to anybody" .... ... "What if it was an accident ? " Wait.. there are no premeditated accidents.. and people get shot every day ! Die every day ! Every minute ! For stupid reasons.. with no real meaning!
And he had a gun. He thought about it.. imagined it bursting forcing his hand upward and back. The heat.. The sound killing sound. The smell.. "Who has ever had these thoughts ? " He wondered.. Nobody goes so deep like him.. "No one is profound as the likes of ME " Who questions life and death like this ? Who wonders in a moment where both are happening simultaneously ? Who wishes to participate rather than just observe ? Is there a beauty out there to match this brilliant mind .. in this brilliant moment of choice.? "Why do you torment this beautiful mind ? " he asked. "Dont think just do ! " he heard in a song once..
WHERE is that GUN ?!?!? he screamed in panic.. Stood up ! Feeling ... a rush of blood entering the brain , creating little sparkly dots that would envelope his vision completely. "Tv Static" he thought .. as he was realizing he had stood up too quick after , without a blink ! starring at the man.. with the gun.. in the mirror. "It was in my hand" he cried out .. as his eyes were seeming to give up. No.. he didnt feel his head banging on the chair he had knocked down when he stood up. But.. he heard a loud BANG ! Followed by the sound of glass shattering and touching the wooden floor right before they shattered again. It seemed .. LIKE CLAPPING. LIKE CHANTING! .. he thought in joy and wonder This must mean ...the show ... is over. He didnt think.. he knew. Exhaled... Credits ?
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Thank you Keep em coming wolf
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EternalCowabunga
Being of Great Significance



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Re: im a wolf [Re: jivJaN]
#9544284 - 01/04/09 03:05 PM (15 years, 27 days ago) |
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I do see similarities between our stories. Especially ""No one is profound as the likes of ME " - I enjoyed that.
What happens in the end? Did he kill himself?
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I felt sorry for grant.
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DrugsRbadMkay
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I'm a dolphin [Re: xFrockx]
#9545443 - 01/04/09 05:44 PM (15 years, 27 days ago) |
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I'm a dolphin and I can shoot a gun
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igwna
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tried a little too much shock factor
the shocking parts should come on slow and hit reaaaaaaal hard
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jivJaN
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Quote:
EternalCowabunga said: I do see similarities between our stories. Especially ""No one is profound as the likes of ME " - I enjoyed that.
What happens in the end? Did he kill himself?
Well yes.. but not intentionally. He banged his head on the chair..
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