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figmentfragment
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Hm...the title had me curious, the beginning had me annoyed, then for some odd reason I continued reading regardless...the style of narration almost made it compulsive.
Perhaps it would have been better suited for the pub, but then again I am sure a lot of "pubbers" have real issues with literacy.
I think I actually enjoyed it.
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OrgoneConclusion
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This was one of those rare instances where the movie was better than the book.
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jivJaN
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heh.. Well if you must drink.. you must write I hope it isnt inappropriate to barge in with this. I read your story and it reminded of something i wrote a long time ago. I cant really remember.. but from reading again after a while .. perhaps i was drunk too 
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There once was a man with a gun. He never had one before and did not know how to use it. It was rough at the handle.. then smooth , shimmering under light giving off little reflections as if it were smiling. As if it were meant to do no harm. He saw it work in movies .. always the same way and he hoped to be the bearer now. Giving thrills .. posing a threat that made people hold hands and cry !! But... he didnt know why .. or who to put in this action packed drama. "Shooting at trees just wouldnt do it" , he thought. What would have to be played out so this piece of metal would find its purpose ? Murder !?!?? "No... thats too much", he said .. "And i really mean no wrong to anybody" .... ... "What if it was an accident ? " Wait.. there are no premeditated accidents.. and people get shot every day ! Die every day ! Every minute ! For stupid reasons.. with no real meaning!
And he had a gun. He thought about it.. imagined it bursting forcing his hand upward and back. The heat.. The sound killing sound. The smell.. "Who has ever had these thoughts ? " He wondered.. Nobody goes so deep like him.. "No one is profound as the likes of ME " Who questions life and death like this ? Who wonders in a moment where both are happening simultaneously ? Who wishes to participate rather than just observe ? Is there a beauty out there to match this brilliant mind .. in this brilliant moment of choice.? "Why do you torment this beautiful mind ? " he asked. "Dont think just do ! " he heard in a song once..
WHERE is that GUN ?!?!? he screamed in panic.. Stood up ! Feeling ... a rush of blood entering the brain , creating little sparkly dots that would envelope his vision completely. "Tv Static" he thought .. as he was realizing he had stood up too quick after , without a blink ! starring at the man.. with the gun.. in the mirror. "It was in my hand" he cried out .. as his eyes were seeming to give up. No.. he didnt feel his head banging on the chair he had knocked down when he stood up. But.. he heard a loud BANG ! Followed by the sound of glass shattering and touching the wooden floor right before they shattered again. It seemed .. LIKE CLAPPING. LIKE CHANTING! .. he thought in joy and wonder This must mean ...the show ... is over. He didnt think.. he knew. Exhaled... Credits ?
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Thank you Keep em coming wolf
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EternalCowabunga
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Re: im a wolf [Re: jivJaN]
#9544284 - 01/04/09 03:05 PM (15 years, 27 days ago) |
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I do see similarities between our stories. Especially ""No one is profound as the likes of ME " - I enjoyed that.
What happens in the end? Did he kill himself?
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xFrockx



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I felt sorry for grant.
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DrugsRbadMkay
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I'm a dolphin [Re: xFrockx]
#9545443 - 01/04/09 05:44 PM (15 years, 27 days ago) |
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I'm a dolphin and I can shoot a gun
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igwna
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tried a little too much shock factor
the shocking parts should come on slow and hit reaaaaaaal hard
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jivJaN
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Quote:
EternalCowabunga said: I do see similarities between our stories. Especially ""No one is profound as the likes of ME " - I enjoyed that.
What happens in the end? Did he kill himself?
Well yes.. but not intentionally. He banged his head on the chair..
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--------------------- All my posts in this forum are strictly fictional. They are derived from an acute mental illness , from which i am forced to lie compulsively. I have never induced any kind of mind altering substance in my life and i have no intentions whatsoever of doing anything illegal. If I have ever suggested such a thing it would have most likely been , due to my personality disorder and i probably do not remember it at all..
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