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Unfolding Nature Shop: Unfolding Nature: Being in the Implicate Order

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sotner poetry
    #7558099 - 10/25/07 06:25 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

i feel the need to express myself to the world.

lately i have been coming up with some sick poems in my head but when i try to "replay" them i come up blank. it is as if these poems are expressions of a feeling that once gone so is the poem. i am usually not around a paper of computer when high so i am wondering....

are there any techniques anyone uses to remember the words they think.

other than carrying a pad around.


i put some old ass examples i think these are at least 2 years old.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558100 - 10/25/07 06:26 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

The confusion multiplies.


Crazy thoughts
Running through my mind

The inescapable reality of inevitability
Will descend and shatter it.

Pieces of a life once lived randomly
Assemble.

A new life created invincible, one
Weakness, one
STRENGTH

The mind.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558102 - 10/25/07 06:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Anchor.

There is always something.
A goal.
A dream.
An image.

Even in the most tormented souls.
Something of warmth
Something
innocent

Attach this to your strong hand.
And pull it up to the surface,
Right behind the eyes.
To clarify what they see.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558112 - 10/25/07 06:35 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

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Attach this to your strong hand.
And pull it up to the surface,
Right behind the eyes.
To clarify what they see.



This is an awesome stanza. :laugh::thumbup:

I have kind of the same problem with memory, although it's not even that often that I'm inspired with poetic words and the like.  When there is something I really want to remember, I just repeat it a lot.  If I know I won't be able to memorize the whole thing, I repeat in my mind the parts I liked best.

Anyway, having a pad around would be good if you could find one small enough to be convenient, no?


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“Strengthened by contemplation and study,
I will not fear my passions like a coward.
My body I will give to pleasures,
to diversions that I’ve dreamed of,
to the most daring erotic desires,
to the lustful impulses of my blood, without
any fear at all, for whenever I will—
and I will have the will, strengthened
as I’ll be with contemplation and study—
at the crucial moments I’ll recover
my spirit as was before: ascetic.”


Edited by Lion (10/25/07 06:49 AM)


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Lion]
    #7558129 - 10/25/07 06:51 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

yeah i live by those lines. :crazy2:

thanks for the support.  most of the people i interact with in real life would probably just stare at me blankly if i read that to them.

:drugnerd:


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558160 - 10/25/07 07:06 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

i dont like poems that don't rhyme :thumbdown:,


peace out Dm


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: dutchmushroom]
    #7558168 - 10/25/07 07:13 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

if you are good with words pleas make my poem rhyme so i can put it in my rap song.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558173 - 10/25/07 07:15 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

hey man i dont even like rap, i like rhymes tho, and i feel that if your gonna call a bunch of words a poem they should rhyme,


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: dutchmushroom]
    #7558179 - 10/25/07 07:18 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

haha understandable. lately the shit i have been coming up with has some sort of rhyme scheme.

but i havent written it down..... aka this post.

well i guess from now on when im smokin solo im gonna take some paper and a pencil and just spit it to paper.

you like rhyme and you dont like rap?!?!?!


that sounds strange to me. it is the rhymiest of music.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558186 - 10/25/07 07:21 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

I really hate free-form poetry.

And as much of a stoner as I am, I hate stoner poetry as well.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558201 - 10/25/07 07:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Quote:

pong said:
The confusion multiplies.


Crazy thoughts
Running through my mind

The inescapable reality of inevitability
Will descend and shatter it.

Pieces of a life once lived randomly
Assemble.

A new life created invincible, one
Weakness, one
STRENGTH

The mind.




are you sure that this isnt a Linkin Park song?


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Boots]
    #7558207 - 10/25/07 07:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

you must hate babies too then.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Boots]
    #7558210 - 10/25/07 07:29 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

yea but im just not "down" with all the stupid shit they say, i believe music should be for kickin back and relaxing, im a dead head, you never hear jerry calling a chick a ho or a bitch, ya never hear him singing about his fly caddy wit da twenty fo's, theres more to life then marterial possesion, but thats enough of my hippie talk for now,

ps. i didint mean to insult your poem, shit it might have been good but i dont really know how to judge that kind of poem


peace out Dm


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: dutchmushroom]
    #7558223 - 10/25/07 07:39 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

words like bitch and ho rhyme easily.:headbang:


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
    #7558227 - 10/25/07 07:41 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

in almost all poetry, the striving towards brevity causes the substance to vanish.


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: SneezingPenis]
    #7558844 - 10/25/07 11:32 AM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Poetry's fun

He didn't do much in life
He never got so far

So, he, uh, one day he looked up to the stars
This is what he said
"What's it like to be near Mars?"

They said nothing back
Just twinkled a little less
Sorry that everything down there was such a mess

While that was happening Venus started to spy
Upon a few women who were all a cry

And their tears fell on their shirts
And they knelt in the dirt
And Venus said to herself "That's just awful!"

Well, I, I think the man came back after that
And the stars still didn't shine that bright
But after a a few shots that was alright
And then he shot his wife in the heart

And then he shot himself in the face
And I was probably thinking
"Hmm, that's um, a waste," I think


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Re: sotner poetry [Re: dutchmushroom]
    #7559152 - 10/25/07 12:49 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Quote:

dutchmushroom said:
i dont like poems that don't rhyme :thumbdown:,


peace out Dm




Quote:

Poets of prime note have
rejected Rime both in longer and shorter Works,
as have also long since our best English Tragedies,
as a thing of it self, to all judicious ears,
triveal and of no true musical delight; which
consists onely in apt Numbers, fit quantity of
Syllables, and the sense variously drawn out
from one Verse into another, not in the jingling
sound of like endings, a fault avoyded by
the learned Ancients both in Poetry and all
good Oratory.  This neglect then of Rime so
little is to be taken for a defect, though it may
seem so perhaps to vulgar Readers


-John Milton, in his introduction to Paradise Lost

Just an alternative perspective.  I like rhyming but it really does restrict the artistic form a lot.  Just read Yeats to see how powerful non-rhyming poetry can be.


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“Strengthened by contemplation and study,
I will not fear my passions like a coward.
My body I will give to pleasures,
to diversions that I’ve dreamed of,
to the most daring erotic desires,
to the lustful impulses of my blood, without
any fear at all, for whenever I will—
and I will have the will, strengthened
as I’ll be with contemplation and study—
at the crucial moments I’ll recover
my spirit as was before: ascetic.”


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