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sotner poetry
#7558099 - 10/25/07 06:25 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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i feel the need to express myself to the world.
lately i have been coming up with some sick poems in my head but when i try to "replay" them i come up blank. it is as if these poems are expressions of a feeling that once gone so is the poem. i am usually not around a paper of computer when high so i am wondering....
are there any techniques anyone uses to remember the words they think.
other than carrying a pad around.
i put some old ass examples i think these are at least 2 years old.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558100 - 10/25/07 06:26 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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The confusion multiplies.
Crazy thoughts Running through my mind
The inescapable reality of inevitability Will descend and shatter it.
Pieces of a life once lived randomly Assemble.
A new life created invincible, one Weakness, one STRENGTH
The mind.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558102 - 10/25/07 06:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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Anchor.
There is always something. A goal. A dream. An image.
Even in the most tormented souls. Something of warmth Something innocent
Attach this to your strong hand. And pull it up to the surface, Right behind the eyes. To clarify what they see.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558112 - 10/25/07 06:35 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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Attach this to your strong hand. And pull it up to the surface, Right behind the eyes. To clarify what they see.
This is an awesome stanza.  
I have kind of the same problem with memory, although it's not even that often that I'm inspired with poetic words and the like. When there is something I really want to remember, I just repeat it a lot. If I know I won't be able to memorize the whole thing, I repeat in my mind the parts I liked best.
Anyway, having a pad around would be good if you could find one small enough to be convenient, no?
-------------------- “Strengthened by contemplation and study, I will not fear my passions like a coward. My body I will give to pleasures, to diversions that I’ve dreamed of, to the most daring erotic desires, to the lustful impulses of my blood, without any fear at all, for whenever I will— and I will have the will, strengthened as I’ll be with contemplation and study— at the crucial moments I’ll recover my spirit as was before: ascetic.”
Edited by Lion (10/25/07 06:49 AM)
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Lion]
#7558129 - 10/25/07 06:51 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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yeah i live by those lines. 
thanks for the support. most of the people i interact with in real life would probably just stare at me blankly if i read that to them.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558160 - 10/25/07 07:06 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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i dont like poems that don't rhyme ,
peace out Dm
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if you are good with words pleas make my poem rhyme so i can put it in my rap song.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558173 - 10/25/07 07:15 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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hey man i dont even like rap, i like rhymes tho, and i feel that if your gonna call a bunch of words a poem they should rhyme,
peace out Dm
-------------------- "Comes a time when the blind man takes your hand says: don't you see? Gotta make it some how, on the dreams you still believe, Don't give it up, you've got an empty cup, only love can fill, only love can fill" < Grateful Dead! The bus came by and I got on, and thats when it all began GROWLIGHT KIT, 250w HPS Digital ballast, + Enhanced Spectrum bulb and Reflector Sale Or Trade!
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haha understandable. lately the shit i have been coming up with has some sort of rhyme scheme.
but i havent written it down..... aka this post.
well i guess from now on when im smokin solo im gonna take some paper and a pencil and just spit it to paper.
you like rhyme and you dont like rap?!?!?!
that sounds strange to me. it is the rhymiest of music.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558186 - 10/25/07 07:21 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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I really hate free-form poetry.
And as much of a stoner as I am, I hate stoner poetry as well.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558201 - 10/25/07 07:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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pong said: The confusion multiplies.
Crazy thoughts Running through my mind
The inescapable reality of inevitability Will descend and shatter it.
Pieces of a life once lived randomly Assemble.
A new life created invincible, one Weakness, one STRENGTH
The mind.
are you sure that this isnt a Linkin Park song?
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Boots]
#7558207 - 10/25/07 07:27 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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you must hate babies too then.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: Boots]
#7558210 - 10/25/07 07:29 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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yea but im just not "down" with all the stupid shit they say, i believe music should be for kickin back and relaxing, im a dead head, you never hear jerry calling a chick a ho or a bitch, ya never hear him singing about his fly caddy wit da twenty fo's, theres more to life then marterial possesion, but thats enough of my hippie talk for now,
ps. i didint mean to insult your poem, shit it might have been good but i dont really know how to judge that kind of poem
peace out Dm
-------------------- "Comes a time when the blind man takes your hand says: don't you see? Gotta make it some how, on the dreams you still believe, Don't give it up, you've got an empty cup, only love can fill, only love can fill" < Grateful Dead! The bus came by and I got on, and thats when it all began GROWLIGHT KIT, 250w HPS Digital ballast, + Enhanced Spectrum bulb and Reflector Sale Or Trade!
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words like bitch and ho rhyme easily.
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Re: sotner poetry [Re: pong]
#7558227 - 10/25/07 07:41 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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in almost all poetry, the striving towards brevity causes the substance to vanish.
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Poetry's fun
He didn't do much in life He never got so far
So, he, uh, one day he looked up to the stars This is what he said "What's it like to be near Mars?"
They said nothing back Just twinkled a little less Sorry that everything down there was such a mess
While that was happening Venus started to spy Upon a few women who were all a cry
And their tears fell on their shirts And they knelt in the dirt And Venus said to herself "That's just awful!"
Well, I, I think the man came back after that And the stars still didn't shine that bright But after a a few shots that was alright And then he shot his wife in the heart
And then he shot himself in the face And I was probably thinking "Hmm, that's um, a waste," I think
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Quote:
dutchmushroom said: i dont like poems that don't rhyme ,
peace out Dm
Quote:
Poets of prime note have rejected Rime both in longer and shorter Works, as have also long since our best English Tragedies, as a thing of it self, to all judicious ears, triveal and of no true musical delight; which consists onely in apt Numbers, fit quantity of Syllables, and the sense variously drawn out from one Verse into another, not in the jingling sound of like endings, a fault avoyded by the learned Ancients both in Poetry and all good Oratory. This neglect then of Rime so little is to be taken for a defect, though it may seem so perhaps to vulgar Readers
-John Milton, in his introduction to Paradise Lost
Just an alternative perspective. I like rhyming but it really does restrict the artistic form a lot. Just read Yeats to see how powerful non-rhyming poetry can be.
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