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OfflineCrystal G
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Penectomy
    #7509159 - 10/11/07 02:37 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

The cadaver flickers with post-mortem affliction; a neural intuition
By way of galvanism,
An organ is detached with transient vivisection
Despicable yet devine, a carcass derived
From a dispute severed with remote appreciation
A Prince Albert attached to the foreskin of him
Conducts high voltage through the wires of it
As her crevice quivers to the tremor like a novice...

Under warm water, a gentle massage
Protruding ligaments, a drainage to hemophilia
She prepares the catheter to penetrate the core
Fishes, implants, injects once more
A solution of formaldehyde flushed to allure
Corpus cavernosum, pending to be adored
polymerizing sulfuric protein chains-
fading of all color, all blue, red, and grey
Coagulated blood so tranquil in the tub…




That’s about as far as I got. It's not finished yet cause I scored some hydromorphone. ill prolly blab on something rigor mortis, bla bla etc.


Edited by Crystal G (10/11/07 02:58 PM)


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509549 - 10/11/07 04:19 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

You'd think people who take so many drugs would write something more interesting

Every literature thing I've seen on here is bland and overwritten

Not to worry, I include myself in that category, I can't write worth shit


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509630 - 10/11/07 04:42 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Poetry is wretchedly subjective. Sometimes I write total nonsense, and my friends like it. Sometimes I write things that make sense, and everybody hates it. :shrug:


Mutilation is an obscure topic to write poems about.


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509632 - 10/11/07 04:43 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Quote:

Hyper_Panda_GO said:
You'd think people who take so many drugs would write something more interesting

Every literature thing I've seen on here is bland and overwritten

Not to worry, I include myself in that category, I can't write worth shit




uh yea, this is shit i just wrote on the spur on some downers. ive been too lazy to write any actual paragraphs.

perhaps you have to read it out loud, enunciate the "poem?" prolly just me being hopeful tho lmao


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509649 - 10/11/07 04:49 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Did it both ways, I still didn't like it, and what's it matter if you wrote it on the spur of the moment?

If you had any talent it'd still shine through, downers or none


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509679 - 10/11/07 04:55 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

*shrugs* this was really intended to be a horror/suspense/thriller chapter series with real pics anyway, this was me writing down the basic ideas.

chill out


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509680 - 10/11/07 04:56 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

I didn't get heated, so there's no reason for me to chill out


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509685 - 10/11/07 04:58 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

what i meant to say was: i didnt put much thought into it
so dont have a stick up your ass
no offense


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509692 - 10/11/07 04:59 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

No offense is honestly the dumbest fucking thing someone could add after an insult


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509706 - 10/11/07 05:03 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

:popcorn:


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Sunny]
    #7509709 - 10/11/07 05:04 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

What, you want to go too motherfucker?


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509714 - 10/11/07 05:06 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

it wasnt an insult, it was to show that i didn't intend what i said to be rude. are you daft?

and lol i fucking hate critics like you, you simon cowell wannabe
i've had to put up with a lot of PMSing judges like you talking diarrhea shit out of their ass (i was a music major at uni)
are you taking out your anger because you sucked balls at the english portion of the SATs?
are you an english major?
did you even excel particuarly in this subject?


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509715 - 10/11/07 05:06 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

C'mon dude, I don't give a shit if you two talk smack for the next decade, it's just silly. That's all. My comment was for the both of you, not one of you specifically. :smirk:

Frankly, I'm not a big fan of the poem myself.


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509719 - 10/11/07 05:09 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

How can you NOT be rude and say something like that?

I fucking hate writers like you who write pretentious shock pulp
I'm not taking out anger, this is just a general comment for something I've noticed
I'm not an English major
I did excel in this subject at school but that only means so much


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509723 - 10/11/07 05:11 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

he's right. im nodding and im over it...

i dont really care hyper panda, its not worth the effort. ive always liked you as a member... though i DO have to laugh at you saying my style is pretentious :rofl2:


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Crystal G]
    #7509735 - 10/11/07 05:13 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

You seem to choose words that show off your medical knowledge, knowing that most people will have no idea what it means

I can;t believe I actually used the word pretentious to describe writing style, I've been hanging around Gamefaqs too much


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509751 - 10/11/07 05:18 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Quote:

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You seem to choose words that show off your medical knowledge, knowing that most people will have no idea what it means

I can;t believe I actually used the word pretentious to describe writing style, I've been hanging around Gamefaqs too much




Look, this can all be explained here: http://www.shroomery.org/forums/showflat.php/Number/7485615

The reality is, I'm in the process of writing several gore/horror chapters. I want this to be extreme, just like the quality of everything else I write. but in order to do this, I HAD to include the proper methods and terminology on body preservation.

with that: things are not what they always seem to be, yadda yadda i gotta clean my room now


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7509812 - 10/11/07 05:33 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Jeeze guys this aint OTD.

Remember what yo momma used to say about not having anything nice to say?



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Re: Penectomy [Re: Middleman]
    #7509845 - 10/11/07 05:41 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

Aw, adorable

I wonder if it died up there


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Re: Penectomy [Re: Hyper_Panda_GO]
    #7520799 - 10/15/07 07:24 PM (16 years, 3 months ago)

panda is on an rampage :yesnod:


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