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A small poem
#7466412 - 09/29/07 05:26 AM (16 years, 4 months ago) |
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rise and shine this is my awakening step out into a fresh new dawn can't say life ever looked this way before i took the leap that changed the way the universe works and I can't help but smile and know that all of this game we call our life is just a thought nothing more than an ILLUSION
Originally posted in a thread in the Psychedelic Experience board, by me, copied here for you viewing pleasure. Just a little spur of the moment inspiration.
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Re: A small poem [Re: Skeeblix]
#7467188 - 09/29/07 12:25 PM (16 years, 4 months ago) |
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the comedown of a psychedelic experience, a new born mind. beautiful.
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Re: A small poem [Re: Skeeblix]
#7467369 - 09/29/07 01:28 PM (16 years, 4 months ago) |
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cool
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Re: A small poem [Re: demiu5]
#7470031 - 09/30/07 11:25 AM (16 years, 4 months ago) |
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Sounds a little angry at the end - who didn't have their morning cup of tea and a joint then aye 
Mostly like it
I just thought I would be honest .
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Re: A small poem [Re: Mirth]
#7470943 - 09/30/07 03:46 PM (16 years, 4 months ago) |
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I don't think it sounds angry... rather pessimistic  But I liked it... good job
-------------------- "Please would you tell me," said Alice, a little timidly, for she was not quite sure whether it was good manners for her to speak first, "why your cat grins like that?" "It’s a Cheshire-Cat," said the Duchess, "and that’s why. [...]"
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Skeeblix
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Nah, not pessimistic at all, just merely a play on the fact that upon returning to the "real world" after a psychedelic journey, you realize just how many things in our life that we take for granted as just being as they are really just came about because we made them up, so technically, government, law, and a lot of other concepts mankind has cooked up are just that. Illusions.
I guess this was kind of an analysis of how futile some of the stuff that goes on today really is, compared to life a thousand years ago when all that mattered was that you and your people hunted enough food to survive, and life was really what you made of it, instead of something forced into a set of goals ala go through school, go to college, get a job, work until you die.
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Re: A small poem [Re: Skeeblix]
#7472973 - 10/01/07 06:09 AM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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... 
Now this poem does actually impress me even more than before
-------------------- "Please would you tell me," said Alice, a little timidly, for she was not quite sure whether it was good manners for her to speak first, "why your cat grins like that?" "It’s a Cheshire-Cat," said the Duchess, "and that’s why. [...]"
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Hey why dont you rewrite it to incorporate some of the things you used to expound it here - because the poem plus what you just said is indeed a very cool insight . Insights are like pretty girls^ there may be many to be had but I still always enjoy playing with more .
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Skeeblix
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Re: A small poem [Re: Mirth]
#7474081 - 10/01/07 01:42 PM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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I might take what I've already got and possibly step the size up a bit so writing in the stipe isn't such a damned challenge. Getting the last few lines to be visually appealing and still fit in with what I was going for was tough.
I figure if I up the length of the lines I use, that should make up for the increased length I'm gonna hafta use, and maybe then I can get a little more detailed with it, like the sudden outward flare followed by the curve inwards of a veil left behind. I dunno. I might screw around with it a bit later.
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Re: A small poem [Re: Skeeblix]
#7475171 - 10/01/07 07:22 PM (16 years, 3 months ago) |
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That was pretty awesome!
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