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OfflineReal_Poopypants
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wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think
    #5373034 - 03/07/06 12:10 AM (17 years, 10 months ago)

I realize I'm committing some sort of sin by not giving titles to some of these before posting them, but I haven't thought of any worthy names as of yet.
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Less than half of me
rejects the master plan,
but more than most of me
doesn't know who I am.

With this catastrophe,
rage within my head
fears of finality -
black thoughts keep them fed.

If this day ever ends
and I'm still standing up,
forever changed - I'll believe again
and drink deeply from his cup.

But his presence never felt
nor existence presumed by faith,
so, within I seek help
and potential goes to waste.

If he is only a prayer away,
how long a prayer must be,
for we can pray the length of day -
a reward - we'll never see.

It wasn't meant to be this way -
we were only meant to be.
If he should show me a better way,
I'll fall down on my knees.
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It seems to be the general view
that I do nothing right.
If you know what's best for me
then step into the light
and take the opportunity
to demonstrate the same.
This is nothing new to me -
all you seek is fame,
but they'll never know
from where this insight came.
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I'd like to present to you
an alternate view,
a fresh perspective,
something new.
Put my shoes
on your feet
and walk with me.

An ancient beat
guides us, seeps
inside us,
new moon hides us,
makes the tide rush,
makes blood flow rust
coloured and so,
all creatures below
make way as we go.
But we will not know
until we get there
if we should be where
no mortal would dare,
no man would stare.

My conscience says this:
that we should not miss
a possible shot
at ultimate bliss
or true happiness,
but what's the risk worth?
Give fate a wide berth.
If we should shoot first
and seek answers later
then plan for the worst.

Our journey will take place.
Our witness - the whole race.
We'll laugh in his face
and give him a taste
of his own cruel
joke and the fool
will know that his tools -
pain and suffering -
are a thing
of the past.
_____________________________________________________________

A Bright Light

The poet inside my head once said:
"Here today,
gone tomorrow".
"Very original", I replied.
To be fair, he did add
"and in it's place
a forever sorrow".
I have much to learn,
but I won't miss my chance to burn.


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: Real_Poopypants]
    #5373612 - 03/07/06 09:25 AM (17 years, 10 months ago)

thats really deep. i like that a lot. where did you find the inspiration for all of this? its really cool. i think you should publish a book if you have more of them. thats what im going to do with mine.

p.s. that link in your signature was very cool.


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: zappa]
    #5376412 - 03/07/06 11:51 PM (17 years, 10 months ago)

bright light is my favorite


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: zappa]
    #5392989 - 03/12/06 06:59 PM (17 years, 10 months ago)

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Moonunit_Zappa said:
thats really deep. i like that a lot. where did you find the inspiration for all of this? its really cool. i think you should publish a book if you have more of them. thats what im going to do with mine.

p.s. that link in your signature was very cool.




Thanks for the compliments, man. I don't know where ideas come from. Sometimes it seems like they come out of nowhere and once I have a line or two it just flows. I do most of my writing on the bus or the ferry and some while I'm lying in bed. I keep a book and a pencil on me at all times. I find the best method to get things flowing is to just write down whatever words and phrases come to you and see what you get. Don't think about what you're writing just listen to what's in your head, the first thing that pops into mind. Give it a try.
Here's one that I came up with by using this method.

Let the truth be told
that futures cannot hold.
You contemplate, but I?ll show you how
the future is just tomorrow?s now.
The past is just the present, gone.
The future is just the present, done.
So if you find you?re looking past
the present, you move on too fast.
The future always moves away ?
The present ? it is here to stay.
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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: Real_Poopypants]
    #5396129 - 03/13/06 06:27 PM (17 years, 10 months ago)

poems don't need titles; nor do they have to rhyme.
don't let "rules" hang up your creative process.


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: Taco Chef]
    #5397731 - 03/14/06 02:59 AM (17 years, 10 months ago)

Quote:

novumorganum said:
poems don't need titles; nor do they have to rhyme.
don't let "rules" hang up your creative process.




true, but it still needs a certain feel or flow. if a poem has no structure it becomes chaotic and loses its meaning... unless the meaning is to be chaotic, but otherwise...


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: eligal]
    #5399922 - 03/14/06 04:44 PM (17 years, 10 months ago)

ah but look at the organic structure of WCW, Whitman, or Ginsberg.


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: Taco Chef]
    #5401916 - 03/15/06 01:17 AM (17 years, 10 months ago)

what about them. they have flow... what are you trying to say.




express yourself!!!  :grin:


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: Real_Poopypants]
    #5402800 - 03/15/06 10:20 AM (17 years, 10 months ago)

I absolutely LOVE your poetry, LOVE IT. It speaks to something that is universally human. I think you could go places with this.

I like the first one you posted and this one:

Quote:

Let the truth be told
that futures cannot hold.
You contemplate, but I?ll show you how
the future is just tomorrow?s now.
The past is just the present, gone.
The future is just the present, done.
So if you find you?re looking past
the present, you move on too fast.
The future always moves away ?
The present ? it is here to stay.




Edited by EllemyshShade (03/15/06 10:48 AM)


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Re: wrote a few poems today. plz let me know what you think [Re: eligal]
    #5409527 - 03/16/06 05:48 PM (17 years, 10 months ago)

Quote:

eligal said:
Quote:

novumorganum said:
poems don't need titles; nor do they have to rhyme.
don't let "rules" hang up your creative process.




true, but it still needs a certain feel or flow. if a poem has no structure it becomes chaotic and loses its meaning... unless the meaning is to be chaotic, but otherwise...




I know they don't need titles, but I just feel like they should have one. Everyone names their kids.

When I first tried writing poetry, I stayed away from rhyming. I thought it was too simple, the easy way out. I have since changed my mind and I think that coming up with a certain rhyming schedule forces you to find more creative ways of wording by describing something maybe in less words than you normally would. I do have some poems that don't rhyme in any way.

Thanks for the compliments, Ellemy. I'm glad you liked them. I have some more that I might post sometime. If you would like to read some of them, let me know.


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