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Psilochotic (a poem I wrote)
    #4658709 - 09/14/05 10:06 AM (12 years, 13 days ago)

Psilochotic

Rambling through the nonsense of an ego lacking mind
I stumble on the past events and always seem to find
A moment?s worth of total loss, reality but a thread
I?m walking through the silent void; neither alive or dead

My body feels no longer mine, I shed the skin away
I lose touch with reality, I know I cannot stay
Unfamiliar memories start coursing through my veins
An amazing source of energy my lucid mind retains

In a state of pure divinity, not a single care exists
The world as I used to know it starts to morph and twist
I mentally regress into a primal driven beast
The Psilocybin entity prepares its mental feast

Terrifying episodes of chaos take control?
Altering what?s real and fake; existence as a whole
Every breath dispelled feels like it?s closer to the last
For every thought that?s reeled back in, another one is cast

A sense of revelation now has swept away the fear
An understanding from within is ever growing near
This retrospective influence has left with me a glow;
The wisdom of a faultless realm, that some will never know


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: Newbie]
    #4662224 - 09/14/05 10:34 PM (12 years, 13 days ago)

That would make excellent lyrics for a song :thumbup:


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: MushmanTheManic]
    #4663320 - 09/15/05 01:37 AM (12 years, 13 days ago)

I've been downloading instrumentals to try and see what it would sound like in a song, but it's harder than I thought it would be  :stoned:


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: Newbie]
    #4666808 - 09/15/05 09:11 PM (12 years, 12 days ago)

thats real good, the only thing about it that i don't like is the form. I forgot what it is called but i don't like that style. If it changed up more i think it would be better; besides that i loved it.

You should try writing your own music for it.


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: art]
    #4668748 - 09/16/05 08:02 AM (12 years, 11 days ago)

I like it. It is pretty good but poetry need not alternating endrhymes unless your Alexander Pope. Ditch forcing yourself to rhyme at the end of every line (it only detracts from poems IMHO)and let your word usage, punctuation, and ideas sing.


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: DirtMcgirt]
    #4672590 - 09/17/05 03:09 AM (12 years, 11 days ago)

I won't usually rhyme it unless I have a word that fits it. And even when I can't think of one right away, I like the challenge of finding a rhyming word that says exactly what I want it to say.


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: Newbie]
    #4674182 - 09/17/05 03:34 PM (12 years, 10 days ago)

Awesome. :thumbup:


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What if everything around you
Isn't quite as it seems?
What if all the world you think you know,
Is an elaborate dream?
And if you look at your reflection,
Is it all you want it to be?



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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: Murex]
    #4680794 - 09/19/05 04:12 AM (12 years, 9 days ago)

thats pretty good.


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Re: Psilochotic (a poem I wrote) [Re: Newbie]
    #4681377 - 09/19/05 12:18 PM (12 years, 8 days ago)

maybe if you chop the form up so its not in nice organized stanzas, to match the chaos of the content.. know what i mean?


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