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alakona
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My First Poem
#4293381 - 06/13/05 09:44 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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I was going through a shit of all my old school work from elementry school and I found my first poem. I wrote it on at my Grandmas table when I was 8.
ahem.
"The Heart By alli p. age 8 1/4
the heart is good, the heart is wise the heart is one to open eyes
the heart can tell from right and wrong but we do not all hear its song
we do not hear its whispering ways when it speaks to us on those lonely days
we do not hear its comforting sigh when we laugh or when we cry
we just choose to ignore, to shut the hearts open door
but one day the door will open again and we'll find our everlasting friend:
The heart"
hahahaha i was so cute.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293384 - 06/13/05 09:45 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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That's so cute. I have poems published online. I'll never tell where though.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: Redstorm]
#4293387 - 06/13/05 09:46 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Quote:
Redstorm said:
That's so cute. I have poems published online. I'll never tell where though.
-------------------- Acid doesn't give you truths; it builds machines that push the envelope of perception. Whatever revelations came to me then have dissolved like skywriting. All I really know is that those few years saddled me with a faith in the redemptive potential of the imagination which, however flat, stale and unprofitable the world seems to me now, I cannot for the life of me shake. -Erik Davis
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alakona
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Re: My First Poem [Re: Redstorm]
#4293393 - 06/13/05 09:47 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Quote:
Redstorm said:
That's so cute. I have poems published online. I'll never tell where though.
-------------------- making you want to be a better person since 2008. TrippinTeddy said: sometimes when I'm raping a bitch, I like to tickle her ribs and under neath her arms, and I say "loosen up bitch, lets have fun now because if I have to kill your squirming ass, only one of us will be having fun, and you can't have a party all by yourself can you?" Then its usually all laughs and good times from there.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293396 - 06/13/05 09:48 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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My first poem ....
Roses are red Violets are blue my dicks hard its because of you
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Nasty old man
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THE KRAT BARON
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293410 - 06/13/05 09:54 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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That is a cool poem and very good for only being 8!
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293456 - 06/13/05 10:07 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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People really do underestimate the intellect of youngsters. That was a good poem. You were "8 1/4" years old?
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293513 - 06/13/05 10:23 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Sweet.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: BanJankri]
#4293522 - 06/13/05 10:27 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Pretty good for an 8 year old
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293523 - 06/13/05 10:28 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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it's wonderful
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293533 - 06/13/05 10:30 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Very good I am a major poetry fan and poet myself ... My first poem was when I was 5 ..... but it wasnt good like your first poem it really suck actually soo great job
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alakona
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-------------------- making you want to be a better person since 2008. TrippinTeddy said: sometimes when I'm raping a bitch, I like to tickle her ribs and under neath her arms, and I say "loosen up bitch, lets have fun now because if I have to kill your squirming ass, only one of us will be having fun, and you can't have a party all by yourself can you?" Then its usually all laughs and good times from there.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293588 - 06/13/05 10:54 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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You still write poetry at all Alakona?
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alakona
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yeah, my dream is to write a childrens book.
i write rhyming poetry... im pretty lame.
-------------------- making you want to be a better person since 2008. TrippinTeddy said: sometimes when I'm raping a bitch, I like to tickle her ribs and under neath her arms, and I say "loosen up bitch, lets have fun now because if I have to kill your squirming ass, only one of us will be having fun, and you can't have a party all by yourself can you?" Then its usually all laughs and good times from there.
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Re: My First Poem [Re: alakona]
#4293618 - 06/13/05 11:00 PM (18 years, 9 months ago) |
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Ahh I wouldnt say its totally lame. You can make some decent cash if you're really into writing. Just go with it.
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