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Ode to Julie
#4072783 - 04/19/05 01:16 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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We drift our way through this world not knowing why we take The path we choose, the things we do, or the decisions that we make We float along some phantasmic trail that doesn't quite exist Striving hard to make sense of this chaotic myst
Reaching out to others as they scurry on their way Is the only hint of happiness throughout this dreary fray The days stretch long as time flies by - it's all so dichotometric Friendships bide as worlds collide creating something hectic Our spirits sink continuously with each new failing test Weakening us ever more as we strive to be our best
As time passes on we find ourselves stretching rather thin Feeling as if there's no way out - no hope, no goal, no win These ghostly forms of happiness simply aren't enough To keep the pressures of this world from seeming quite so tough
And so we find ourselves again in this ever-present pain Trying hard to ignore the thoughts within our brain Going out to fraternize hoping it will cure Whatever illness we've acquired that's making us so impure
But after many hours spent reaching out to others We begin to feel distant - strangers amongst our brothers As if we aren't capable of the most simplistic things Stumbling through all the bullshit that this world brings Knowing all too well we'll never have a rest For in our minds it seems as if every thing's a test
And so we feel as if there's nothing left to do But take that final leap of faith as we say adu One last time to say goodbye - one last note to write One more final duty and that's turning off the light
Never knowing who we've touched or how they've been affected Cause as they were all loving us, we only felt rejected Passing off their kindness as obligatory social grace And returning the same favor with a smile 'pon our face Never giving anyone a chance to see our pain Yet always wondering why things always stay the same
Perhaps because it's known their reactions would be reflex "I shall save this pathetic sap with my mighty pecs!" But would they come to the rescue if we hadn't called out to em? Apparently not, cause that wasn't the case - we all just passed right through em
Which is why we're at a place we never wanted to be Staring loneliness in the face for all eternity While others sit around asking the eternal question 'why' There's nothing left for us to do but sit around and cry
Cause you'll never know your contributions til it's much to late To make amends with all your friends - to let go of the hate And so you sit in darkness regretting that final leap While those who truly loved you continue loosing sleep
There is no happy ending for those that take this path Only loneliness, frustration, fatiguefulness, and wrath And not just for those who walk it - but also those around Bitterness grows with all these woes - salvation can't be found There is no hope, there is no goal, nor anything to win Only vague labels we give each other depicting foe or friend
But labels change as people grow, and soon that matters not Cause all are foe who could be friend...yet often times are not And so we float on ever more wondering what to do Hoping that we might avoid having to say adu
Edited by Muppet (04/19/05 02:26 PM)
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4072813 - 04/19/05 01:23 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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if you took the time to read this could you please just make some sort of response...it doesn't have to be a comment or whatever, a simple emoticon or something would do
I don't need feedback or anything, I just want to know that it's been seen
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4072996 - 04/19/05 01:56 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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You should break it down into stanzas, then it would be a lot more readable and you'll get more responses.
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Muppet
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very good point my friend
done and done
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4073097 - 04/19/05 02:33 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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not bad at all man.
-------------------- Men look at themselves and they see flawed humans, we look at women and we see perfect GODDESSES Women look at themselves and they seem utterly human, when looking at men they see proud GODS. ~Casil
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4073130 - 04/19/05 02:41 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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Yeah, I liked it. This part flows well:
The days stretch long as time flies by - it's all so dichotometric Friendships bide as worlds collide creating something hectic
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that's probably about the only part too
but it wasn't meant to be a good poem or anything, just a release of what I was feeling...so it don't matter to me if the flow is all fucked
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4073169 - 04/19/05 02:57 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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I didn't mean the rest of it was fucked... just saying I liked that part in particular... it jumped out at me.
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4085758 - 04/22/05 04:51 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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bleh...it seems only two people actually took the time to read this
I shoulda expected that though
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4087200 - 04/23/05 12:29 AM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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I read it and I really liked it. The end kinda got to me
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Dankman]
#4088694 - 04/23/05 02:12 PM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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Quote:
Dankman said: I read it and I really liked it. The end kinda got to me
i agree, i really like this part:
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But labels change as people grow, and soon that matters not Cause all are foe who could be friend...yet often times are not And so we float on ever more wondering what to do Hoping that we might avoid having to say adu
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Its pretty good.....but poems with end-rhymes on every line and no meter whatsoever make me vomit. No offense, just my personal opinion of that form. I did like some of your word usage, though.
-------------------- "And we, inhabitants of the great coral of the Cosmos, believe the atom (which still we cannot see) to be full matter, whereas, it too, like everything else, is but an embroidery of voids in the Void, and we give the name of being, dense and even eternal, to that dance of inconsistencies, that infinite extension that is identified with absolute Nothingness and that spins from its own non-being the illusion of everything."
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4090683 - 04/24/05 02:03 AM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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Wow.
Edit: This is Irijes.
-------------------- "There was a dirty rainbow coming out of the fucking toilet" - 40 Oz.
Edited by Dankman (04/24/05 02:04 AM)
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Dankman]
#4090704 - 04/24/05 02:12 AM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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stoner
-------------------- how's your WOW? Edited by yageman (04/20/06 4:20 PM)
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masterpiece
you described my journey with her too.
/me hugs the candyman
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4091405 - 04/24/05 11:38 AM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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i miss her too man
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4091422 - 04/24/05 11:47 AM (18 years, 11 months ago) |
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I love this!!
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Re: Ode to Julie [Re: Muppet]
#4098522 - 04/26/05 11:09 AM (18 years, 10 months ago) |
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damn, that really came from the soul. well put, did you give her a copy of this? I've gotta say the A-A, B-B, C-C, D-D, rhyme scheme made it hard to stay engaged, but the message was strong.
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