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Offlinefreddurgan
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If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of nature
    #3804171 - 02/19/05 08:04 PM (11 years, 9 months ago)

http://www.prism.gatech.edu/~gtg100r/A_Slave_to_Nothing.doc

It's actually in favor of human progress. I'm not a "kill nature" kind of guy but I value humans more than nature, so what must be done must be done. However things that can be changed, like oil to electric cars, need to be changed.

That's not what my paper's about I'm just clarifying my personal views.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: freddurgan]
    #3804786 - 02/19/05 11:07 PM (11 years, 9 months ago)

Still up for grabs. All my friends are either dumb or too stoned. You can be stoned when you read it, but if you're a burnout and just go "dude, that was good man" like my friends it won't help.

No pressure by the way. I'd be surprised if I got one person to read it, haha. My feelings won't be hurt.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: freddurgan]
    #3804827 - 02/19/05 11:17 PM (11 years, 9 months ago)

Okay, I will. Someone proofread one of my papers for me last semester, at like 3 AM in the morning before it was due and it was really helpful. Now it's time for me to pass on the help to someone else. You're only looking for grammatical errors, right? Is the paper supposed to be formal? Or loosely formal?

I'll be back in a little bit after I get some food.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: Letto]
    #3805076 - 02/20/05 12:31 AM (11 years, 9 months ago)

It's loosely formal. I just want to make sure you don't get lost while reading it. I'm fairly sure it flows well, but if it doesn't I want to fix that. I can find grammar pretty easily. As long as you know what I was trying to say by the time you are done reading it, I'm satisfied.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: freddurgan]
    #3805115 - 02/20/05 12:38 AM (11 years, 9 months ago)

wish I would've known that before I started. I only got through 2 pages and I'm about to go to bed. I can finish it up tomorrow after work. PM me your e-mail address and I'll send it back to you tomorrow night.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: Letto]
    #3805175 - 02/20/05 12:55 AM (11 years, 9 months ago)

Lol, it's double spaced. You can probably get through it in like 3 minutes.

Really I'm just looking for advice on content. Grammar I can handle.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: freddurgan]
    #3805213 - 02/20/05 01:05 AM (11 years, 9 months ago)

couple suggestions, if you like.

personally i think "humans discovered agriculture" sounds better than inventing.  such as this that your wrote " All these things were inevitably discovered slowly and without direct intention, "  that sounds better to me.

"Humans have an adept ability at learning to control their environment, from chopping down trees to building bridges to creating complex shelter, and agriculture is no exception to this pattern"

isnt controlling the environment, its modifying it.  if ti was controlled, soil erosion, floods, storms, fires etc wouldnt be an issue.  im not really stoned but maybe im off on this one.

i think adding to this quote would be appropriate.  "With agriculture, the people choose where the people go."  "...in most cases." or some fancy way of saying somthing similar.  agriculture is good, but hardly makes a given place 100% sustainable.

just basically stuff like that in my eyes.  but maybe thats teh way you where tryign to go with it. 

looks good though man! :stoned:


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: kadakuda]
    #3806316 - 02/20/05 12:37 PM (11 years, 9 months ago)

Yeah I do see your point..control is maybe not the word I'm looking for..but modify is too weak. We do have some aspect of control. Maybe I should say they control their resources, not the environment. That might be easier.


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Re: If anyone is hella bored, you can proofread my paper about agriculture and human dominance of na [Re: freddurgan]
    #3808093 - 02/20/05 08:45 PM (11 years, 9 months ago)

I downloaded it. I'll try to proofread it by the end of tonight. It sounds like a great topic to write on.


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