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OfflineJon
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my poem
    #3567051 - 01/01/05 01:22 AM (13 years, 4 months ago)

The rice blessed by the lies of life float closer to me
Save me from the sin of bread before people stone me
White shadows pouring over the stone in focus
Where am I what is this hocus pocus?
THe trees are bleeding waving their branches in dismay
Where will I sleep, there are needles in the hay?
The mirror reflecting remained in fragments
The sky always falling, the air stagnant
Half a bottle of bliss and I still hiss where hollands hope is
Branded into my brain, I gamble with rain, my hope is where the rope is.


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Invisiblewandrnshaman
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Re: my poem [Re: Jon]
    #3567554 - 01/01/05 05:23 AM (13 years, 4 months ago)

I like that, very nice imagery to go with the smooth flow of words. You should write regularly.


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OfflineTodcasil
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Re: my poem [Re: wandrnshaman]
    #3577106 - 01/04/05 12:13 AM (13 years, 4 months ago)

not to shabby, i agree with shaman


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OfflineBrAiN
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Re: my poem [Re: Jon]
    #3577118 - 01/04/05 12:15 AM (13 years, 4 months ago)

milk milk lemonade round the corner fudge is made...


or



carnation milk is the best in the land
here i sit with a can in my hand
no tits to pull no hay to pitch
just poke a hole in the son of a bitch


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Re: my poem [Re: BrAiN]
    #3582855 - 01/05/05 05:01 AM (13 years, 4 months ago)

nice poem!

i don't really mind but why not make this line "Where will I sleep, there are needles in the hay?" like this "Where will I sleep, are there needles in the hay?" insted?

no biggie though

and yeah i agree... lots of great imagery and flow (though a little on the dark side)


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OfflineJon
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Re: my poem [Re: Simisu]
    #3586239 - 01/05/05 10:59 PM (13 years, 4 months ago)

thanks all, glad you like it and there will be more to come


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