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OJK
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First Draft of self portrait
#3465430 - 12/08/04 03:36 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Hey all;
This is all made with flash, and I'm pretty inexperienced, so feel free to criticise. This is just the first, pretty sketchy draft. All feedback wellcome.
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JacquesCousteau
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3465464 - 12/08/04 03:43 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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That's pretty cool, man... my only critique would be that you should lighten up on the cheek indentation lines, or atleast the one on the right side. (the drawing's right side, not your face's right side.) They look a little too prominent, comes off as more of a solid edge than an indentation.
Besides that, keep working on that, because I think it will be pretty fucking bad ass when you're done! I really dig the way you've used symbolism and surrealism together with the syringe/guard tower.
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3475584 - 12/10/04 10:52 AM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Quote:
Odiumjunkie said:
This is all made with flash
i was thinking about learning flash. what's the name of the program you used? is it called "Flash" ? i need to conduct a search to download a *cough* free *cough* copy.
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: thePatient]
#3475801 - 12/10/04 11:40 AM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Christliar
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3485152 - 12/12/04 02:50 AM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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It looks great to me, pal. =)
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3485465 - 12/12/04 08:10 AM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Mowah! mowah! We want mowah!
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3490352 - 12/13/04 09:26 AM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Damn! Nice job. Better than most of the hacks I've seen here.
I don't bag on bad work, but I will congratulate the talented.
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: nonoman]
#3494156 - 12/13/04 08:30 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Odium, I really don't know shit about flash, but didn't realize you can draw still images. I thought it was primarily for animation and games and that you would have to import your own images.
I'll PM you for some more info. I have an idea for a flash game I think would be fun and addicting.
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vampirism
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: OJK]
#3494185 - 12/13/04 08:34 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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i like a bunch of the shapes and marks, but I think I'd have to question the composition.
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: vampirism]
#3494277 - 12/13/04 08:50 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Morrow, could you elaborate? I guess it makes sense if you really like some of the lines and shapes, but then what about the composition is unappealing?
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Re: First Draft of self portrait [Re: ricelicker]
#3494327 - 12/13/04 08:57 PM (19 years, 2 months ago) |
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Well,
for starters, I just don't think the poppies fit. Shape-wise, they relate fairly well. But they unbalance the value range way too much IMO. Also, there's a bunch of dead space, even within what shouldn't have any dead space. If you only look at a little bit of the image at once, its hard to see..
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