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 Simisu
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 a yet unnamed poem 
#3407245 - 11/25/04 04:33 AM (19 years, 4 months ago) |
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My mouth is blowing smoke rings
Dancing to air pressure and the vibrations of Earth
An electromagnetic field dissipating to the air
If only my ears could Smell every molecule of its Sound.
My eyes see energy of fractal equations
To release bursts of frequency/Energy
Energy
Lifting the veil of perception
Making Words be a constant of a fractal
And sound a crazy oscillation of energy
To repeat a cycle which IS a fractal a Life equation which I AM.
A sea of representation of a constant in an oscillation is a sea of representation
Of a constant in an oscillation is a sea of a sound of words
Energy fluctuating, beating, pleasing, releasing vibrations of joy
Life consume energy
I am a bubble of oscillating energy
A Life equation obsessively consuming but never the less
Resulting in ZERO
And perhaps just a ONE
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Edited by simisu (12/26/04 03:25 PM)
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 Amber_Glow
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 Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Simisu]
#3411292 - 11/26/04 04:15 AM (19 years, 4 months ago) |
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Very trippy indeed.
Makes sense while not making any sense at all.
I like it.
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Simisu
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Amber_Glow]
#3431534 - 12/01/04 04:19 AM (19 years, 4 months ago) |
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thanks 
i've been getting that bemused replay from all my freinds and family(though most of them don't understand some of the words...)
im actually pretty pleased with the outcome
it was my first day off after about two weeks of working in a gas station all the time so i started the morning with some paco de lucia (flamenco) and a fat lazy morning joint and my first smoke ring made me start to think up the lyrics and i had to write it down
i dont usualy write poetry or anything only when i REALLY need to get something out...
i'd love any further comments on this so don't be shy!
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Simisu]
#3431618 - 12/01/04 05:36 AM (19 years, 4 months ago) |
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Um, it's original but it's pretty meaningless to me. Just sounds scientific and show offish.
I'd like you to explain it though?
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Simisu
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well... i'm not gonna attempt to explain it since i'd like people to think whatever they want about it. what it means to me doesn't matter!
show offish in what way rouge pixie?
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Simisu]
#3432158 - 12/01/04 10:11 AM (19 years, 4 months ago) |
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I really like that, the bit about smelling the sound really reminds me of the mixed senses I get when I'm tripping sometimes. Brings back excellent memories and it seems pretty relaxed whilst somehow being clever and fast..Don't ask me how I'm but a mere peasant
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Simisu
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well... i made a small change...
i still dont have a name for this poem and i was hoping for some more comments
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Simisu]
#3544608 - 12/26/04 04:07 PM (19 years, 3 months ago) |
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Good poem and understood from a few points of view. 
On the flip flop, It lacks a certain flow or exponential rhythm. But I like it
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Fucknuckle]
#3550306 - 12/27/04 08:48 PM (19 years, 3 months ago) |
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I agree with rougepixie. It has no real meaning and you use "trippy/clever" words like oscillation and fractal randomly and pointlessly. Here is my imitation:
Words are like trippy bouncy bears
oscillating in fractals in oscillations of fractals oscillating in fractals
Bouncy bears are like trippy oscillations as fractals fuck my ass shut up.
That's about it.
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Gog]
#3550322 - 12/27/04 08:51 PM (19 years, 3 months ago) |
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I'm three quarters joking.But I do think you misuse all the words... and it is not a poem I like in any way...but it gives me an idea of what you felt like at the time, and that's super. Plus you got to express yourself to a bunch of other people. who cares about the results.
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Re: a yet unnamed poem [Re: Gog]
#5966078 - 08/15/06 12:54 PM (17 years, 8 months ago) |
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i missed this poem, haven't read it in a while...
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