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Offlinejamzymc
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Start of a rap what you think?
    #25031319 - 03/01/18 09:55 AM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Ancient astronomy alining stars astrology
abnormal abnormalities axioms, anomalies
ancient aborigenies annihilated awfully
advances amazing aesthetically, aided artificially

Administered authority, architects of austerity
Assembled armies artillery,
Aiming for ascendency

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc]
    #25031327 - 03/01/18 10:01 AM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Crap.

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc]
    #25031332 - 03/01/18 10:03 AM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Grade: A-

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc] * 3
    #25031359 - 03/01/18 10:21 AM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Trash. Sounds like something Connie would write 0/10 :thumbdown:


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I'm stupid, Enlil is smart.
I'm ugly, Enlil is beautiful.
I'm a loser, Enlil is a winner.
Someday, I hope to be like Enlil but secretly know I never will.

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OfflineNOUS333
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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Malcolm_Xtasy] * 1
    #25031965 - 03/01/18 02:53 PM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Too complex and doesn’t make sense.

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InvisiblePlain
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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: NOUS333] * 1
    #25032013 - 03/01/18 03:02 PM (6 years, 29 days ago)

Keep working at it.


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- Eckhart Tolle

“Everybody is ‘you’. Everybody is ‘I’. That’s our name. We all share that.”

- Alan Watts

"Cosmic apotheosis wears off quicker than Salvia"

- Rick Sanchez (voice of Justin Roiland)

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc]
    #25032224 - 03/01/18 03:55 PM (6 years, 29 days ago)

I am no rap expert.  Just a simple observation: you used only words that start with the letter "A."  I am going to assume that was deliberate.  As far as the meaning of the rap lyrics, it seems you were going for something cryptic.  I don't have the slightest clue as to what you were trying to say.


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A society governed in terms of double standards is self-destructive



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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Asclepius]
    #25032240 - 03/01/18 04:01 PM (6 years, 29 days ago)

I’m the motherfucker at the bar
Dipping his hands in the ice bucket
Look at my eyes bitch they’re crazy
Look at my crazy looking eyes
Then look away son
It’s ya brotha sis
Poopin out yellow bricks
I think they call em gold sticks
Bitches stay away from me
Cause I’m scared and freaky
Ready to love you like a pussy
Then chill out because I don’t want to offend you
Kiss you on your booboo
Let’s be friends and not make shit intense

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InvisibleAsclepius
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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: remake] * 3
    #25032275 - 03/01/18 04:18 PM (6 years, 29 days ago)

You lost me at the "poopin' out yellow bricks" part.  LOL

:joneswtf:


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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Asclepius] * 2
    #25032438 - 03/01/18 10:36 PM (6 years, 28 days ago)

You're trying to hard. Just say what you really feel and it will be much better

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Lophosaurus]
    #25032714 - 03/02/18 03:51 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

The start is about ancient people being the first astronomers then the next part is us not understanding them. The next part is how Usa formed and the part after was about the advances made through the power of the USA. The next part is about the American empire building its armies. And world dominance.

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc] * 2
    #25032732 - 03/02/18 04:52 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Quote:

Lophosaurus said:
You're trying to hard.




Exactly what I was going to say. It just seems like you're trying to force something, and it doesn't flow.

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OfflineNOUS333
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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc]
    #25032905 - 03/02/18 07:28 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Quote:

jamzymc said:
The start is about ancient people being the first astronomers then the next part is us not understanding them. The next part is how Usa formed and the part after was about the advances made through the power of the USA. The next part is about the American empire building its armies. And world dominance.



I don’t think ‘ascendency’ is ‘domination-y’

I respect the insight you must have and the drive to express it but it seems forced.  Keep building the insight and try talking about it in normal everyday conversations with friends and that will help you realize a more organic way to word your expression of it in a way that a wider variety of eyes and ears will relate with and comprehend quicker/easier.

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc] * 3
    #25032921 - 03/02/18 07:38 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Quote:

jamzymc said:
The start is about ancient people being the first astronomers then the next part is us not understanding them. The next part is how Usa formed and the part after was about the advances made through the power of the USA. The next part is about the American empire building its armies. And world dominance.




Have you been listening to a lot of Damian Marley lately?

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc] * 5
    #25032927 - 03/02/18 07:40 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Try the next chapter of the dictionary.


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It's just some nights, you really want to go out, get some hot bitch to dump Goose down your throat and snort coke off a stripper's tits.

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Scott Bennett]
    #25032933 - 03/02/18 07:44 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

I didn't like his use of "of".

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: Revok]
    #25032940 - 03/02/18 07:49 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)


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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: CHeifM4sterDiezL]
    #25033146 - 03/02/18 09:47 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

trapped inside the bottle,
lost inside the cup,
along the path i lost myself,
i still dont give a fuck,
baby cause i loved you,
now i feel regret,
along the way the prophecy was never met,
the pain ran to deep,
cause you are why i never sleep,
its just what i fucking reap,
sow this fuckin mask i weep,
(faster flow)
baby blue eyes wish i could mend time,
remove the bind you put on my mind,
(back to normal)
free myself from you,
i know you never knew me itd be hell for you,
probably for the better that you brushed me off,
i watched you everyday but we never talked,
when you took a walk,
everynight when you would sleep,
take a shower feed your kids and maybe eat,
or kick back your feet and relax,
flexin in your green slacks,
it drove up me the wall we werent together,
i just wanted to love you baby forever,
i came up with somethin swore it was so clever,
in the end we could maybe even die together

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: xbloodwhipx] * 1
    #25033178 - 03/02/18 09:58 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Big A, little a, what begins with A?

Aunt Annie's Alligator

A..a..A

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Re: Start of a rap what you think? [Re: jamzymc]
    #25033205 - 03/02/18 10:07 AM (6 years, 28 days ago)

Quote:

jamzymc said:
Ancient astronomy alining stars astrology
abnormal abnormalities axioms, anomalies
ancient aborigenies annihilated awfully
advances amazing aesthetically, aided artificially

Administered authority, architects of austerity
Assembled armies artillery,
Aiming for ascendency



Don’t do dis

D-


What’s funny though is OP was feeling himself so good on this rap
Thought it was an Emmy in the making

Edited by plasma (03/02/18 10:09 AM)

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