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Anonymous #1
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A poem 6
#23594571 - 08/30/16 05:56 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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(redacted) my love I miss you I wish I could help you but I can't You don't deserve to be trapped in loneliness but I can't be there for you in the isolation of your heart but I feel your wounds as my own.
When I wake up in the morning you are on my mind and you are in my heart. Your wounds are my wounds My attentions smother as my love smothers my heart When will you see these words bled from my heart? How long must I wait?
(redacted) Where are you? What are you doing? How are you feeling? When your haunted slumber ends what or who is in your heart? I want to join you in your night mares to protect you from your demons as you sleep in peace and contentment (redacted) Please Let me ease your burden Let me feel your pain for you so you can sleep blissfully and dream of green pastures and perfect happiness and awaken smiling kissed by a gentle sun safe safe safe in your lover's arms I love you my beautiful warrior (redacted) Every minute that arrives fills me with hope that it will be your minute for me for us the first of many I pray And as my thoughts Of you erupt From the margins of my Thoughts onto The vast empty slate of the future I pray we fill together And they turn with Dread to the terrible Reckoning fear That you will never hear the song Of my heart that My love is like A monster praying To prey upon Your love's wounded And vulnerable tears But my yearnings cannot be contained by the margins They gnaw upon my heart I pray The future upon which I write Large, the declarations of my Deferred longing for the present stay forever, in An earthly Paradise In your clasped hands In your gentle embrace In the warmth of your breath upon The sweetness of your lips my neck And the strength Of your love, as certain as your Beauty.
--8/30/16
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Crumist
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I like it *snaps*
-------------------- 'I am all for resources being allocated to the widowed single mother of 3, lost husband over seas fighting for our country. I am for vets getting mental health access and resources following war. I am not for free money cause a woman can't close her legs or some chump with low testosterone no going to work cause "i'm sad."' -finalexplosion Nice knowin ya'll! https://www.shroomery.org/forums/showflat.php/Number/23904704/vc/1#23904704
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akira_akuma
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Re: A poem [Re: Crumist] 1
#23599747 - 09/01/16 01:56 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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that is a pretty fantastic poem.
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Anonymous #1
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Tanks guise
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akira_akuma
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i like the yearnings cannot be contained by the margins part, very fitting that those particular lines are not contained within the margins, and by the by, you have a great flow too, i like the enjambment. it's very melodious.
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pineninja
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Wonderful. I also enjoyed how you played with the structure.
-------------------- Just a fool on the hill.
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Chakra Shock
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That almost made me cry, anon#1.
I'm going through something impeccably similar... I don't know whether or not you wrote this about your present circumstances, something you imagined or the past, but lord have mercy I know that feel.
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Anonymous #1
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Present circumstances
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Anonymous #1
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my beautiful one is safe, and my mania is over... I don't know what the future holds for us but I can finally sleep peacefully again knowing she's safe.
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Chakra Shock
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I'm still hanging onto the edge of the cliff, arm outstretched. I hope to hear of her return to balance soon, but your poem is still relevant to me, man
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Edited by Anonymous (09/07/16 07:47 PM)
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Kinda in that position too only I know she won't be coming back.
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Anonymous #1
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Wellp, I'm in hell and my therapist is on vacation.
All I can think about is her... All I care about is her... There's nothing left but her, my days are spent uselessly tagging along with her company or deep in pining. I don't know how to carry on. I don't know how to take care of myself. I don't know how to stay focused on my responsibilities. I don't know what the future holds for us. I don't know how to ask. I don't even know how to talk to my friends anymore. I don't know how to talk to my fucking PARENTS anymore. I can't even shitpost anymore. There is nothing left. I might as well be dead. My friends tried to warn me, but they were too late.
I hate love. This is a terrible disease. I wonder if I will ever recover.
Edited by Anonymous (09/09/16 09:45 AM)
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Chakra Shock
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You will recover, good sir, simply gather your will, every last ounce of it, and spend two hours doing something specifically for yourself without any interruption of thought or action.
The next time you do something like that, it will only be easier!
Go get some groceries, take a deep breath, exercise and maybe let her know that you need to take some time for yourself for a few days, to reconvene with your heart, friends and family. Love is important, relationships are important, but you can't effectively engage in any of that if you are not taking care of yourself.
I know what it's like to be fully devoted to someone, but if it is having a negative effect on your life then you need to ask yourself about the nature of your devotion: is it an addiction, or true compassion and love? Only you can answer that, but it seems like you would do yourself a favor by taking some time to yourself.
Best of luck!
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Anonymous #1
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"So you're obviously highly intelligent," she said. "What do you do with that? What's your outlet?"
I hesitated before admitting: "Mostly, I shitpost."
She took a moment to regain her composure. "Armchair general, huh?"
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She just said that she loves me...
I'm almost in shock... I'm so happy that I've been able not only to tend to her wounds but to have my love returned... It feels like a miracle...
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Chakra Shock
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I love you dude! :P Still lingering in the dense clouds of silence and possibility. My love goes to her on the winds of fate.
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