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caman
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Caman Writings/Poetry Thread
#21783468 - 06/09/15 02:19 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Hey if you guys don't mind I was wondering if you would read some of the stuff I have been writing & let me know what you think? if its good then great ! if it stinks well oh well ! haha.
an uncherished soul, practically perished into a black hole, rules are the reverberation of a ridiculous rigmarole, the emergence of undesirable thoughts cause us to be moody & mad, humanity finds flaw in the state of being sad, but whats more human then raw emotion & feeling? I look up at night & wish to see a paisley painted ceiling, the thorough interpretation of dreams is immensely revealing, where you fall you will find meaning, there is a wall with a silver screening, in deep waters is where its best to begin the reeling, if the line is empty, just try again & you may find plenty, accept yourself & embrace euphoria & empathy
the world is a panopticon, and the night is darkest before the dawn which is why we must unite together and act strong , with a little love we can all get along, some will claim our mind has gone, but its only gone free of its shackle, so say fuck the forbidden fruit and eat the apple, the glass isn't half empty its half full, living life should be the opposite of a hassle , achieve your dream and be the king of your own damn castle!!
perpetually perplexed, to learn that love & hope are the best, fuck the system Ill break it down like food when i digest , I never let my eyes rest, because "how could your eyes not be open at this point ?"
I am a fun guy , when I ingest the fungi, a mushroom kingdom alumni , my trip will be done by, lets say the time the sun dry, the soaked leaves, I eloped with the breeze, with hopes of hugging as many trees as I please, the powers that be, plan to put this to cease, but I wont give up my freedom with ease, I CHOOSE TO BE FREE, THERE IS NO OTHER OPTION BUT TO BE ME !
not one to seek attention, but I want her's , I would love to frolic through the flowers, & pick her only the finest, we would form the perfect alliance, the opposite of being mindless , is to sit & observe in total silence, which is what I do when her lips move, when her body groove, to lovely tunes, not in it to just get laid, just want to take her hand & hold it but im too damn afraid, I want to write her poetry & perform a serenade , if looks could kill, her face would be a katana blade, we are a perfect match it seems, well.. atleast in my dreams.
my efforts just cant seem to cut the mustard, being around her for the first time caused me to be frantic & flustered, didn't even have the courage to just say "hey" ,as she left , in my mind I was yelling please do stay !! , last step off the premises, my anxiety is my number one nemesis, I severely fear there will never be an end to this, should I tap into my former genesis? nah to my past that would be a betrayal, impale , my skin on every single rusty nail, I was born to fail, gouge out my eyes & learn to read braille
Edited by caman (06/15/15 09:25 PM)
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caman
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: caman]
#21784394 - 06/09/15 05:51 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Any verdict?
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: caman]
#21784412 - 06/09/15 05:55 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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if looks could kill, her face would be a katana blade
This is pretty bad.
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: caman] 1
#21784431 - 06/09/15 05:58 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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caman said: Hey if you guys don't mind I was wondering if you would read some of the stuff I have been writing & let me know what you think? if its good then great ! if it stinks well oh well ! haha.
an uncherished soul, practically perished into a black hole, rules are the reverberation of a ridiculous rigmarole, the emergence of undesirable thoughts cause us to be moody & mad, humanity finds flaw in the state of being sad, but whats more human then raw emotion & feeling? I look up at night & wish to see a paisley painted ceiling, the thorough interpretation of dreams is immensely revealing, where you fall you will find meaning, there is a wall with a silver screening, in deep waters is where its best to begin the reeling, if the line is empty, just try again & you may find plenty, accept yourself & embrace euphoria & empathy
the world is a panopticon, and the night is darkest before the dawn which is why we must unite together and act strong , with a little love we can all get along, some will claim our mind has gone, but its only gone free of its shackle, so say fuck the forbidden fruit and eat the apple, the glass isn't half empty its half full, living life should be the opposite of a hassle , achieve your dream and be the king of your own damn castle!!
perpetually perplexed, to learn that love & hope are the best, fuck the system Ill break it down like food when i digest , I never let my eyes rest, because "how could your eyes not be open at this point ?"
I am a fun guy , when I ingest the fungi, a mushroom kingdom alumni , my trip will be done by, lets say the time the sun dry, the soaked leaves, I eloped with the breeze, with hopes of hugging as many trees as I please, the powers that be, plan to put this to cease, but I wont give up my freedom with ease, I CHOOSE TO BE FREE, THERE IS NO OTHER OPTION BUT TO BE ME !
not one to seek attention, but I want her's , I would love to frolic through the flowers, & pick her only the finest, we would form the perfect alliance, the opposite of being mindless , is to sit & observe in total silence, which is what I do when her lips move, when her body groove, to lovely tunes, not in it to just get laid, just want to take her hand & hold it but im too damn afraid, I want to write her poetry & perform a serenade , if looks could kill, her face would be a katana blade, we are a perfect match it seems, well.. atleast in my dreams.
my efforts just cant seem to cut the mustard, being around her for the first time caused me to be frantic & flustered, didn't even have the courage to just say "hey" ,as she left , in my mind I was yelling please do stay !! , last step off the premises, my anxiety is my number one nemesis, I severely fear there will never be an end to this, should I tap into my former genesis? nah to my past that would be a betrayal, impale , my skin on every single rusty nail, I was born to fail, gouge out my eyes & learn to read braille
Mod Edit- No flaming in the Pub.
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Mad_Larkin

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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Cj-B] 2
#21784467 - 06/09/15 06:06 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Cj-B said:
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if looks could kill, her face would be a katana blade
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Mad_Larkin]
#21784498 - 06/09/15 06:12 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Haha shit I just got wrecked ! defiantly agree with the katana line.. probably the most cringe worthy line out of everything in there. I do appreciate the honesty though, I will probably keep my writings to myself from now on
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: caman] 1
#21784514 - 06/09/15 06:14 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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ur stuff is decent
all of the people who posted in this thread are a part of this awful shroomery gang of cyber-bullies that call themselves the "chilluminati", it's best to disregard what they say
-------------------- "Ur cat died because he hated u" - Koods "I hope JSB kicks your ass one day." - Vandago "you are the biggest 'internet guy' I have ever come across"- Jokeshopbeard "The more I see you post the more I realize you're just this fuckin tie dye loser who trolls the Shroomery 24/7." - Herbologist "Sheekle you cannot vile the dice of bullshit you have posted on this forum over the years, I like databases" - thelastoneleft "or maybe i just come from a blood line of superior intelligence" - trees R.I.P Kelsy, ?/?/?? - 6/11/16
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Sheekle] 1
#21784541 - 06/09/15 06:20 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Sheek didn't you start the Chilluminati?
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: caman]
#21784553 - 06/09/15 06:22 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Eh, it kinda sucks. But its really not my type of writing. Just sounds like a bunch of hippie diarrhea
-------------------- I'm stupid, Enlil is smart. I'm ugly, Enlil is beautiful. I'm a loser, Enlil is a winner. Someday, I hope to be like Enlil but secretly know I never will.
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Malcolm_Xtasy] 1
#21784567 - 06/09/15 06:25 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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I thought it was middle school level rap music at first..
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Psychonautica]
#21784577 - 06/09/15 06:27 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Psychonautica said: Sheek didn't you start the Chilluminati?
No, I started the Warminati Pretty much arch enemies of the Chilluminati
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Sheekle] 2
#21784585 - 06/09/15 06:28 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Sheekle said: ur stuff is decent
all of the people who posted in this thread are a part of this awful shroomery gang of cyber-bullies that call themselves the "chilluminati", it's best to disregard what they say
chllhrt
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: propensity] 1
#21784598 - 06/09/15 06:30 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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caman said: Hey if you guys don't mind I was wondering if you would read some of the stuff I have been writing & let me know what you think? if its good then great ! if it stinks well oh well ! haha.
an uncherished soul, practically perished into a black hole, rules are the reverberation of a ridiculous rigmarole, the emergence of undesirable thoughts cause us to be moody & mad, humanity finds flaw in the state of being sad, but whats more human then raw emotion & feeling? I look up at night & wish to see a paisley painted ceiling, the thorough interpretation of dreams is immensely revealing, where you fall you will find meaning, there is a wall with a silver screening, in deep waters is where its best to begin the reeling, if the line is empty, just try again & you may find plenty, accept yourself & embrace euphoria & empathy
the world is a panopticon, and the night is darkest before the dawn which is why we must unite together and act strong , with a little love we can all get along, some will claim our mind has gone, but its only gone free of its shackle, so say fuck the forbidden fruit and eat the apple, the glass isn't half empty its half full, living life should be the opposite of a hassle , achieve your dream and be the king of your own damn castle!!
perpetually perplexed, to learn that love & hope are the best, fuck the system Ill break it down like food when i digest , I never let my eyes rest, because "how could your eyes not be open at this point ?"
I am a fun guy , when I ingest the fungi, a mushroom kingdom alumni , my trip will be done by, lets say the time the sun dry, the soaked leaves, I eloped with the breeze, with hopes of hugging as many trees as I please, the powers that be, plan to put this to cease, but I wont give up my freedom with ease, I CHOOSE TO BE FREE, THERE IS NO OTHER OPTION BUT TO BE ME !
not one to seek attention, but I want her's , I would love to frolic through the flowers, & pick her only the finest, we would form the perfect alliance, the opposite of being mindless , is to sit & observe in total silence, which is what I do when her lips move, when her body groove, to lovely tunes, not in it to just get laid, just want to take her hand & hold it but im too damn afraid, I want to write her poetry & perform a serenade , if looks could kill, her face would be a katana blade, we are a perfect match it seems, well.. atleast in my dreams.
my efforts just cant seem to cut the mustard, being around her for the first time caused me to be frantic & flustered, didn't even have the courage to just say "hey" ,as she left , in my mind I was yelling please do stay !! , last step off the premises, my anxiety is my number one nemesis, I severely fear there will never be an end to this, should I tap into my former genesis? nah to my past that would be a betrayal, impale , my skin on every single rusty nail, I was born to fail, gouge out my eyes & learn to read braille
Mod Edit- No flaming in the Pub.
Also I really fail to see how posting a letter from HST is flaming.
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Psychonautica]
#21784602 - 06/09/15 06:31 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Psychonautica said: I thought it was middle school level rap music at first..
Yeah now that I read through it again I realized it rhymes
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: propensity]
#21784620 - 06/09/15 06:33 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Did op ask you for an opinion and then report you for flaming?
The butthurt is strong in this one.
-------------------- The chances of you even being born, Were forty million to one. There's two parts of the statistic And I want you to live through one 3/8/95 - 7/10/15 Rest In Paradise, Brother. Sheekle said: yeah, i said i was afraid of psychonautica

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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Psychonautica] 1
#21784633 - 06/09/15 06:35 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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I reported Prop, he didn't give an opinion. He was just being mean
-------------------- "Ur cat died because he hated u" - Koods "I hope JSB kicks your ass one day." - Vandago "you are the biggest 'internet guy' I have ever come across"- Jokeshopbeard "The more I see you post the more I realize you're just this fuckin tie dye loser who trolls the Shroomery 24/7." - Herbologist "Sheekle you cannot vile the dice of bullshit you have posted on this forum over the years, I like databases" - thelastoneleft "or maybe i just come from a blood line of superior intelligence" - trees R.I.P Kelsy, ?/?/?? - 6/11/16
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Sheekle] 5
#21784643 - 06/09/15 06:37 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Snitch
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Sheekle]
#21784649 - 06/09/15 06:37 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Of course you did, ultimate trshhrt.
That was a letter from HST to this guy who sent in one of the most masturbatory drug addled pieces of writing ever.
It was the only thing anyone should have posted.
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Sheekle] 2
#21784654 - 06/09/15 06:38 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Sheekle said: I reported Prop, he didn't give an opinion. He was just being mean
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Re: Check out some of the writing's I have done [Re: Mad_Larkin]
#21784705 - 06/09/15 06:45 PM (8 years, 7 months ago) |
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Keep writing tho OP. Doesn't matter if we like it.
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