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Alexestalex
fallen angel


Registered: 03/20/12
Posts: 5,644
Loc: heart of the sun
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poetry
#19217890 - 12/02/13 03:52 PM (10 years, 1 month ago) |
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I wrote this poem, feel free to critique!
"Life is theater, theater is life, we're all actors in this cosmic surprise Some play the roles of beggars and slaves, sentenced to a life full of demise and disgrace Others lead and cause the world to sway, while some live in the moment without a dull day But once the play ends and the curtains all close, every single hoax will unfold For the play is scripted, down to the line, no good deed goes unheard no foul act unpunished When the game ends and our actors all bow, the deck is reshuffled and the new roles are passed down Never forget that once it all ends, the ace and the two go back to the same deck."
Also, feel free to post your favorite works of poetry here or add your own!
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Stay far from timid, only make moves when your heart's in it.
Edited by Alexestalex (12/02/13 03:56 PM)
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st1llnox
dx'd PTSD/ADHD--please don't ask



Registered: 11/27/12
Posts: 7,312
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That's really cool, especially the ending about the ace and the two. I feel like without that interesting flourish, it would have been good/solid but piling up that extra meaning and the multi-etendre within at the end makes it GREAT.
I also at first thought it was heading a Christian direction halfway through, but then I started getting more Buddhist/reincarnation vibes... is that what you were going for?
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wrestler_az
PsiLLy BiLLy



Registered: 08/11/02
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Loc: day dreams of a mad man
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cast away on a desert island surrounded by endless ocean, In search of sweet asylum from all the chaos and commotion.
instead im enslaved by merciless waves of undefined emotion,
I shake as they break on the shores of my brain with cruel and unusual devotion.
Underground I make my way And hope to greet the coming day with a tale of this golden moment
But If its my fate to find my grave Between the walls of this dark cave, I pray these words engraved today May stay and remain unspoken.
-------------------- how's your WOW?
Edited by yageman (04/20/06 4:20 PM)
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