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Invisible22Carat
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How am I supposed to write a short biographical paper...
    #18811367 - 09/07/13 12:08 PM (10 years, 4 months ago)

Without using the passive voice? Does anyone have any tips? I'm getting really frustrated. I keep leaning toward using is and I have no idea how to eliminate it. Help me Shroomery brethren.


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Re: How am I supposed to write a short biographical paper... [Re: 22Carat]
    #18811402 - 09/07/13 12:22 PM (10 years, 4 months ago)

Practice metaphor.


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Re: How am I supposed to write a short biographical paper... [Re: 22Carat]
    #18811404 - 09/07/13 12:23 PM (10 years, 4 months ago)

Just make sure the subject is always performing the action of the verb. 

An example of where you're having trouble might help.


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...the whole experience is (and is as) a profound piece of knowledge.  It is an indellible experience; it is forever known.  I have known myself in a way I doubt I would have ever occurred except as it did.

Smith, P.  Bull. Menninger Clinic (1959) 23:20-27; p. 27.

...most subjects find the experience valuable, some find it frightening, and many say that is it uniquely lovely.

Osmond, H.  Annals, NY Acad Science (1957) 66:418-434; p.436


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Invisible22Carat
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Re: How am I supposed to write a short biographical paper... [Re: badchad]
    #18811415 - 09/07/13 12:28 PM (10 years, 4 months ago)

Here are a couple of sentences. I was too lazy to write in the names of the towns, I left them out to do it later. It just sounds choppy to me, but I did avoid the passive voice.

Robert Wright, an American journalist born in ….... (raised in....) [1], grew up in a Southern Baptist family. Growing up in a Baptist family [2] it is surprising that he went on to write some great books on evolution and logic.

I know it sounds bad in general, but this is my rough draft.


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Re: How am I supposed to write a short biographical paper... [Re: 22Carat]
    #18811425 - 09/07/13 12:31 PM (10 years, 4 months ago)

Honestly, it probably just needs to be fluffed up a bit. Add some little personal details, what have you. That will break the monotony of narration and give you plenty of opportunities to use the active voice.


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