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Was doing more writing, couldn't sleep and it all just came out. You know the drill just tell me what ya think....
I never thought that we would, I never thought that we actually could, but now, I'm not sure of anything, anymore I cant help how I feel about this whole thing still praying im gonna wake up, and its all a bad dream feeling regret, for things ive done, or things that ive said wondering how things could have been, lying alone in my bed wondering after I hang up, about what else I could say still wishing you'd call, with the answers to keep my questions at bay and all I can do is just wait it out losing my mind, till I just wanna scream and shout remember the times we shared, and wondering what its all about your voice and your eyes, such a soothing disguise was soothing at first, but now burns to the touch heads feelin ready to burst, falling down with no crutch lust or trust, what was it blinding me from seeing the simple truth, which it seems to be to me, should have always been plain to see, that we were never meant to be
what is it that keeps me, from hitting the floor? thought it was faith, but I lost alot of that since before cant keep going this way, cause i got lost along ways back how many times has it been, i must have lost track how many times I thought to myself, how I want you back no matter how doubtful I hold onto a hope, maybe things will get better that maybe through all this we can cope, feel that happiness again whenever cause im sick of the sad times, we've had to share together but you know, truthfully my love for you, is always and forever just remember the fun times we had, and the smiles we shared everything you did for me, just to show me that you cared dont be afraid your not alone, your not the only one scared I never wanted to say goodbye, or to make you cry just wanted to help spread your wings, so that you could fly fly away with me......
Your poem is pretty good, a clear snapshot of an ended relationship and the mixed emotions it brings. I think this part in particular is well said;
"how many times I thought to myself, how I want you back no matter how doubtful I hold onto a hope, maybe things will get better that maybe through all this we can cope, feel that happiness again whenever cause im sick of the sad times, we've had to share together but you know, truthfully my love for you, is always and forever"
Your poem reminds me of this one, one of my favorites, written by Louis MacNiece after his wife left him for another man. It shares the bittersweet flavor of your poem, hope you like it.
The Sunlight on the Garden
The sunlight on the garden Hardens and grows cold, We cannot cage the minute Within its nets of gold; When all is told We cannot beg for pardon.
Our freedom as free lances Advances towards its end; The earth compels, upon it Sonnets and birds descend; And soon, my friend, We shall have no time for dances.
The sky was good for flying Defying the church bells And every evil iron Siren and what it tells: The earth compels, We are dying, Egypt, dying
And not expecting pardon, Hardened in heart anew, But glad to have sat under Thunder and rain with you, And grateful too For sunlight on the garden.
-Louis MacNiece ?
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