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writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback)
#14183182 - 03/25/11 06:45 PM (12 years, 10 months ago) |
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I've been a lazy butt all my life and haven't worked and working for your sustainance for your place here on earth is the most stressed point my guidance from up-stairs has focused on for me atleast. I've myself been wollowing in the suffering for pleasures balance idea/concept/notion/paradigm, afaicr not pointed to by my guidance but it's something I can't let go of seeing how nature works and how animals live, and being Nordic with winter and summer I easilly fall into that line of thinking. also take in account that frankly as I've lead my life, I'm almost suprised up-stairs hasn't arranged a fatal accident for me but I guess god is great and life is about learning... I've been so under-achieving after biting the apple that for over a year I've lived in a total fear of up-stairs being utterly sick of me and my ticket out being destined for down-stairs... might explain the tone of my lyrics
the lyrics are meant to be a combination of a putting the persuit of personal atonement into words (or the notion of it should it really be luke-warm) and inspiration, muse:ing for the population still living in fully strapped tight, solid and unchallanged reality (for some kind of better future of where we as a civilisation strive for (in short for example: dead machine planet or in harmony with nature)).
that being said. you might understand my angle with these lyrics. and if someone else has had a rough time after a change in ones reality and received pressure from up-stairs I'd love to hear what your weary mind and heart wants to ventilate. <3
suggestions for additions/changes? comments? critique? or are you working on something similar, I'd love to read/hear (:
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#14183281 - 03/25/11 07:02 PM (12 years, 10 months ago) |
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so first up: ---------------------------------------------------------------- lyrics for song work in progress "upon a pedestal". (listen) (mp3) ---------------------------------------------------
upon a pedestal, summer time, waits for us again let's see what's edible, subtle crime, question is just when I long for... trifle things that weigh me down, and then I long for... something else than dollars pounds and yen
as life should take its toll, winter time, calls for stronger men so do a barrel roll, but make it rhyme, speak or grab a pen we long for... feathered wings, wax them on again a song for... the weathered beast, the martyr in the pen
so swing your parasol, summer time, sun screen factor ten recite a parable, like a mime, think or practice zen I long for... a simple life, one that makes more sense won't need more... than what I make, way to go pretence
just read an article, physics things, "matter's not that dense" some kind of particle, the mystic sings, of matters more intense we wrong for... trifle things that weigh us down, and then we long for... that feeling that we had once way back whence . . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- and that's two verses, I got some feedback from Tal, very insightful where he pointed out my apologeticness and lack of honesty in my atempt not to offend (man he's spot on when he comments on personal accounts) and I feel now my these lyrics are perhaps well rhymed but not so constructive for either me nor the listener be it a peer or a regular person (not condensension meant!).
I think I need to make the bridge and chorus lyrics more optimistic and constructive moreso than apologetic and slightly pessimistic? as they come off now. gratitude and love I think could be the main motifs.
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#14183300 - 03/25/11 07:06 PM (12 years, 10 months ago) |
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I think it's good. Reminds me a bit of myself tbh.
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: teknix]
#14618839 - 06/15/11 05:47 PM (12 years, 7 months ago) |
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contentment
lyrics in clip
a hypocritical "speak-for-oneself" kind of song with a sort of longing from the heart to be able to follow the advice though... just imagine a plump round, deep voiced female jazz singer.
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#14618918 - 06/15/11 06:05 PM (12 years, 7 months ago) |
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http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_110614_valium.mp3
the winter sings but I can't hear the words you speak is the summer warm this time please tell me I can't feel I tried to meet you there to freeze but I was weak, another year does the sunlight cast a shadow on yourself that you can see? oh valium it's just another day, oh god it's just, just another day valium, learning how to steal what could be given ...
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#15455241 - 12/02/11 03:53 PM (12 years, 1 month ago) |
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http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_111010_c.mp3
I know of your worry, like you I wish I could shake it the vision so clear has turned blurry but like you I dream that we'll make it just today please let me hold you and I'll say, my love, it will be alright but it's heard, and those tears also in my eyes
no one else? someone has to be doing the same thing around here to cope with life after biting the apple...?
better out than in 
but yeah.. need to make something more loving and cheerful like Spektor's "Folding Chair" or such... or try and make something embarrassing but in that vein like usual...
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#15455325 - 12/02/11 04:06 PM (12 years, 1 month ago) |
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oh this one aswell...
more cheerful! (not so good though)
for those who have a 24/7 constant commentary from a special friend on the other side.
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_110510_keep_it_up_to_beat_17.mp3
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sun is rising and we never see (keep it up to beat...) through the every time
[soprano aria + cantonese airport voices]
. . see the ways of the odd . connection reaching out to touch your inner wheels in motion gearing up to meet . another view another you one more inclined to see what might be true should happen that you'd find a way to feel the ocean hearing up to beat ... hearing up to beat
. you're not alone it's just a question of belief an invitation seeking help may bring relief a closer company a sharing of your mind it can be tough so best be kind make sure to never fall behind . . . . . or you may not like what you find. . . keep it up to beat. . . keep it up to beat.
[soprano aria]
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boring repetitive continuation... but what the heck.
...don't childrens laughs just melt away all of your anxieties?
please post something even if you just made some lyrics in 5 minutes recording it with a guitar on a desktop mike 
it's the expression, not the quality that matters. I'm longing to connect to others dealing with the same post-apple life hardships through artistic expression.
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: nimnimnim]
#15455655 - 12/02/11 05:18 PM (12 years, 1 month ago) |
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i was going through some of my old journals that i've been keeping for quite awhile now and came across this this morning... i wrote it right around the same time i was formally diagnosed with schizoaffective disorder eight years ago... i realize it's really not really lyrics per se' but if you try real hard you can read this while listening to your music... i tried it and it seemed to work for me...
i hope you can appreciate this...
i'm in the process of trying to understand consciousness as the foundation of our human experience and the reality that is perceived... there is no ghost in the atom... more so, the atom is a creation of our mind... consciousness creates reality... i want to test the limits of perception, to move beyond the constructs that restrict existential possibilities... i've learned it is indeed the logic that can trip us over, the pervasive thoughts that create our prison... real truth lies in the depths of the heart... it is time to abandon this reality that has obscured what is real and what is not... I am not sure about the future of this world, but I trust that the world that I see is changing shape and that a new personal capacity for love, joy and truth will soon be revealed... i guess i am trying to transcend my outdated mind state, trying to overthrow all those rules and regulations that society has placed on me, trying to see the light amongst the shadows...
Kensho
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: cateyes]
#15459176 - 12/03/11 01:38 PM (12 years, 1 month ago) |
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dark. i love it
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Re: writing lyrics spiritual/life/religious context thread (participate/feedback) [Re: cateyes]
#15900879 - 03/04/12 08:31 PM (11 years, 10 months ago) |
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cateyes: wow. that is a great read. I wish I didn't feel so much like icarus and could feel the same enthusiasm for what I perhaps as a pondering, always bestranged inhabitant of this reality should... I'm glad you shared it!
I've had many valium+alcohol-overdoses that brought me to the ER from which I have no memory but whilst waking up I had been raving about how everything contains spirits.. in everything... every plant, that we need to be kind to them and not ignore them. how the stinging nettle doesn't sting if you caress it kindly and with attention (something I discovered a summer while wwoof:ing in britain... pretty mindblowing how you don't need any substance to have that kind of communication a plant).
this comes to mind: β"The Earth is the cradle of humanity, but mankind cannot stay in the cradle forever." ~ Konstantin Tsiolkovsky
the following may be just negative energy but it's me expressing myself and my emotional and mental state. so if you feel up to it.
maybe we're all the prisoner citizens of the matrix so dependent upon it that we're would fight to defend it or however Morpheus worded it.
or maybe living here however fitting it is is a necessary lesson we go through...
I've had feedback from Tal/Paris to be honest and sincere and do and say what I'm qualified to do/say... this was another expression I later found to be pretence. http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_111010_c.mp3 made this recently: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_120119_lalala_wail_bratty_stuff_h.mp3 it's rather silly and again I don't quite like how it's mainly just a complaint or something.
more wrestling with my thoughts on man and nature: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/nim_120202_d.mp3 " go down to the mire, see if homeliness will come to town for the eyre, cite the trees what we have done I need a stove for fire, cold's the squall I shelter from slate house of the shire, chimney billows back the grum " still after writing this sure I did ventilate but I'm being totally unhelpful. it's also preachy and role-playing... just a sorry call for someone to tell me I've got it all wrong.
after the last trip I had on Haze (massive overdose judging what everyone I could find reports from reported they took) I kind of want to crawl into my bed rocking back and forth in fetal position mumbling forgive me...
I still want to have a proper acid trip in the future when having my life sorted out and being free of my guilt-ridden state of mind (mainly due to long time of unemployment and sick leave from burn-out syndrome and what everyone around me sees as psychosis which while it's not how I'd label it, still drains all of my energy every day). have tried to hold jobs but either I hit the wall of burn-out or stressing out from dark thoughts I can't escape until I have to quit. will try again soon anyway. I think I've taken a liking to this bumpy ride to some degree and I can only accept that I don't have the energy left after my 24/7 telepathic commentary and dark thoughts to pull off much more than 25% occupation if even that. but I'd like to work until I faint for once. like an olympic athlete. that's some sort of dream.
so anyway today I started this: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/5042186/120304%20rock%20stuff_c_nim.mp3 "
when the snow melts, and you're in my view I can see it, what you said was true that time, and again it never changes, always is the same
I was hiding, in my favourite place where I didn't have to see my face this time, and when it ranges all the way to what is due
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when the ice breaks, I could call your name you would catch me, and you'd win the game time, is pain but it helps if you can free yourself from shame "
I think this may be the first time I'm actually ventilating in some way so I'm expressing my qualms but also being honest, sincere and perhaps constructive to a slightly higher degree. will complete this one. would like to be able to perform. but man am I immature. maybe if I just know to know the reach of my understanding and not pretend.
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