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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: akira_akuma]
#23616218 - 09/05/16 08:37 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Yes I only started writing stuff down recently....amazingly cathartic to get some of this stuff to the external rather than spinning around over and over. Once down I can move on.....never really had that luxury before.
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#23616265 - 09/05/16 08:50 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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yeah, well, first off, i mean this stuff is as good as published, as far as i am concerned (and certain publications. Rattimer The Cat was made for publication but it sat around for so long, i said fuck it, i might work on something else; and also some others that were sent a long time ago [two years almost] have been reworked a bit, and then some older poems i just started loading up here to unload them to start fresh, as it were.)
but now i am just essentially doing three things; let's narrow it down for the fuck of it, i am honestly just doing a: practicing material, b: i get influence to write here, and from here, necessarily, because i 1: have to get the juices flowing and i do this for personal reasons, not for mere enjoyment, (though there is that) and 2: i need an outlet other than just my own speculation on whether it's any good or not, because even though i don't mind writing just for myself (it's why i started out) i do want to take it more seriously, it's just that i'm new to it, and well, poetry isn't exactly the most commonest thing anymore, and it's frankly a learning process, me having no experience prior, or any academic training in poetry, as with much else; because of this i need an audience.
and c: this is my training ground for learning about what i want in all this regard, so i can work on my own style of poetry, and get A and B concocted together to make me get the right vibe, flow, juice, energy, whatever you want to call it, inspiration, to create a more serious work, so i tend to now take it very seriously, hence, again the need for the 'training ground', as it were; so to say, my 'hunting grounds' ... my 'venue'.
i write poetry because it's the music that i can attribute to the record i have of my own music, other than my fallible bricolage music that i have been doing otherwise, some of which i'd call sound poetry.
in fact, i'll post some sound poetry of mine. it's 20-odd minutes long, in toto, though, you need some spare time if you wanna listen, in full.
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#23616271 - 09/05/16 08:52 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Spirit
Man's awareness Dim by comparison Utterly dim
A dark age heralded By the lack of any sensitivity To matters of the spirit
Man's soul records As he works and plays away At trifles, at meaninglessness
Can this be forever? Can a conscious void touch infinity? Can absence be present? Must we toil in superfluousness?
So Earth marches forward I suspect She has ulterior motives But that doesn't help us
We are expendable
So maybe this is a grand strategy To replace man? To redeem man?
Ramshackle being Dull dull dull Ferocious inanity Decorous insanity
Can man share in his own spoils? Only time will tell; Can we mend our brokenness?
The future will be stranger than we imagine And we shall return to where we are
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#23616311 - 09/05/16 09:05 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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I have no training and only started writing anything 6 months ago. I'd be lying if I said the plus 1s didn't feel good but I am only really writing for me, and here they can sit with a relativity that doesn't warrant me being institutionalized.
That last one was excellent btw.
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#23616361 - 09/05/16 09:21 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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I used to draw birds But now I draw blood And shoot it back inwards I've become a quite dud
Where once I liked Legos And painting and plots Now I like matchsticks Old spoons and blood clots
My girl thinks I'll pass From some foolish mistake Yet I simply dream Of relief from this ache
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#23616676 - 09/06/16 12:04 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Good stuff quantum!
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: ModestMouse]
#23616774 - 09/06/16 01:15 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Hope you find that relief writer. Enjoyed the poetry.
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#23617885 - 09/06/16 11:37 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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The American Dream
They say one calls it the "Dream" Because you have to be asleep to believe it So many chasing -- chasing their tails A life so empty, and one's actions aggrieve it
What has America become? What was it ever? A vision of revulsion -- why Must I deem it clever?
They tell you to buy in No one could tell you why Not to do it is a sin A comeuppance by and by
Pursue wealth, pursue fame! The proximate rallying cry Must compete, get ahead Hustle 'til you die!
Cooperation anathema The common good a phantom Be a good little worker bee Uncle Sam will pay you your ransom
Real success, naturally Is a very different thing It consists, of course, in the relationship One has that oneself must bring
"There is no wealth but life" So sayeth the modern sage The value of a soul, indeed Is not set by one's wage
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#23619090 - 09/06/16 05:47 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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You sold us on a dream and we believed it sight unseen. Free you cried, no need to worry its easy let the market decide. Gullible or bamboozled doesn't really matter. Into wonderland we traveled completely trusting the hatter.
Now the pills seem to be wearing of the books almost finished. Here we are left with a society diminished. We lock ourselves in cages of wealth. With little to no though of society's health.
We've been taught that bigger is better and we need more. Ultimately unsustainable an implosion in store. We allowed the few to push on us what we need. Without realizing they've seen our weakness and are using our greed.
I don't celebrate things. Happiness is not what it brings. The best things in life have to be free. Maybe when the superpowers become worthless then we can see.
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#23620595 - 09/07/16 02:25 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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There is something missing even the hardened must agree. For no matter the science there are inconsistencies for all to see.
Evolution is clear, and provable, no doubt. So how could our estimations of human existence be so far out.
Maths allows certainty a framework which is strong. And yet there are holes that show even it can be wrong.
Physics is concrete and something that explains. Until you get real small or large or our brains.
The commonality I see is close but not quite. I just don't think a singular theory can ever be right.
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#23627976 - 09/09/16 04:15 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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expeditions of sound and sight submerge my cells in sapphire mind cross-connections masks of time, marked floating through air and process heap the last day i stood, only a memory that transmitted regret of existence, battled a material resistence, a lumen condensation leading to gaseous escalation; making the squeamish torpid, emasculated like a flower missing it's light and water, but that's not what worries me anymore, i'm dead and gone and out the door
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: akira_akuma]
#23628482 - 09/09/16 09:31 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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I really liked that.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: pineninja]
#23628965 - 09/09/16 12:56 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Hello,Love-I welcome you(Dedicated to Aphrodite) tentative title
Love is an abstract idea:It is incapable of thoughts or feelings Yet,I believe,it could not have picked a better host than us(humans)to express its emotions and intentions Hello,Love-I welcome you
Love is like a waterfall-soothing and pleasant Love is like a teddy bear-warm and cuddly Love is like a majestic lion and quick-witted cheetah:strong,passionate,clever Love is like a car-Fast,for the adventurous and exploring types and slow-for those who love to cherish the moment Love is like the birds and sky-It is free and knows no limits
People always tell me when I love a woman that seeing is believing.Yet I counter this always by saying,"If seeing is believing,then believing is seeing." Hello,Love-I welcome you I am to the Eros of Earth,as you are to me the Aphrodite Your apple-blossom scent drives me wild with ecstatic pleasure Our love is hotter than the sun(what's hotter?our love!)
Your vivacious breasts are like two golden apples-I want to touch and treasure them forever Your luscious lips are like two strawberries-I want to taste them until the end of time Your round,curvy buttocks is like a juicy plum-I want to caress it and squeeze it until my soul beckons me to stop Your long,slender legs are like works of marble-I want to look at them until my eyes grow weary Your beautiful,elegant face is like that of Aphrodites'-It causes me to mumble and lose my wits Your long,elegantly flowing hair is like rivers of stars-It dazzles and amazes me to no end Your perfect vagina is like the fountain of youth-It keeps me young and beautiful forever Your heavenly,radiant smile is like a rainbow-Its peacefulness washes over me and cheers up my life Your free,caring spirit is like Mother Nature herself-beautiful,sexy,lovely even beyond the reaches of Time itself
Throughout my life,people said I was a fool to fall in love But they have never really loved the way I love They also say that love dies and that it cannot withstand defeat-to them I say,"Impossible!and it can!" Others say violence reigns supreme and love is overthrown-to them I say,"Amor vincit omnia!-LOVE CONQUERS ALL!" END
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#23630420 - 09/09/16 07:54 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Seasonal
Summer went by in the blink of an eye And autumn is nearly upon us Soon leaves will fall low and wind will get high And warm clothes will have been put on us
Verdant transitions, into such forms As red, orange, yellow and brown And all of a sudden, here are the fall storms And smiling turns into a frown
The air crisp and cool, with just a tinge Of that smell I cannot quite describe Here we are again, just beside the fringe Of the chilliest wintertime vibe
It's funny, indeed, how time slips away And pulls that warm rug from beneath us I long, how I long, indoors for the day When the springtime such warmth shall bequeath us
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#23634321 - 09/10/16 11:02 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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When my water runs out of me The snail has slaked it's thirst He's ready to come 'up from the well' -- it's the signal he's done
Breathe, drink, carve, Consume
Today the snail came up to me "I require replenishment now", he said. "The day is a new one -- it's gone from signals of fire, to smoke"
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: akira_akuma]
#23634662 - 09/11/16 02:59 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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akira those two are brilliant . . .
A lot of really good stuff
Will contribute momentarily
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#23645046 - 09/14/16 03:50 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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The Shaman
Doctor, healer, psychonaut A bit also of priest He was all of these and none A mystic, to say the least
Schizoid not uncommon But so revered was he Despite the modern prejudice This ancient was quite free
Ancient agent, 'tis to say Of the supernatural Communion and participation Second-nature natural
Intimate connection With each one in the band Symbiotic, oft' psychotic Vivid, sacred land
One would be hard-pressed To make an institution Of nature's doing such as this The present's dissolution
Rituals honed over eons In some cases thousands of years Having been passed down directly All but gone now, save only tears
The Shaman has no place here In this material modern plane There is no more passing of wisdom And the candidate's insane
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#23645410 - 09/14/16 06:15 PM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Easily my new favorite. Made my day.
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#23646593 - 09/15/16 05:07 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Good stuff. Okay so much for momentarily, but here's one
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Written in the anthill, written in alphabetic numbers Human sacrifices to the human god Candles unlit but burning Locks unshackled but still safekeeping the truth Is intelligence a kind of love? Where did I find you . . . Where did I put you last And where do I go to get past? Suns, moons, bright and dark skies Which will come for me . . . When I stand between the days? Her name was not there I couldn't speak it So I took it out of my pocket And realised she was my door Never did I know in the glowing light around her That perhaps such things could be reflected Without diminishing us all Now I go into the dark unease Of a twilight not born Into her quiet eye And think to myself The golden rain on her soul must feel like silver To the pure touch of the dying fires In the clouds of unspoken majesty Which salute above Because that army destroys nothing; Everything that is not love I want to see again Like the blind man without a notion Who breaks into the sunrise Who breaks into the rain And see nothing but the purity Of life The deepest mystery yet founded On this golden universe Of aging fires and forgotten soils See again and say Not why did you put me here But why you come again
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#23646600 - 09/15/16 05:17 AM (7 years, 4 months ago) |
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Unborn villages, unseen skies No one has been here No one here dies
I look into the mouth of the predator Death isn't that fierce But the next few moments will be
So I saw the day vanish And I thought he'd come this way Many eons ago I predicted the passing Of yet another moment of solitude And into the pit of Hell Goes a few more Unsure of God's mercy Unsure of man's clay
Stars swirl I see them move closer to each other And further And they shift what they owe to each other In the midnight breeze, where I lost my own self I lost him, deep within my self Never to be found except when I try once more to see in the dark of closed eyelids With only the withering torch of memories of lost years And horrors And more
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