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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Icyus]
#19824568 - 04/10/14 05:04 PM (9 years, 9 months ago) |
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Ice clinking on the trees after frozen rain. Wishing into these winter blues, sighing I speak softly to you...
"Ripples in the breeze to lain, Drawing nearer into May."
Lie winds, seated on this Autumnal lap, nearest to you.
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Only truly dearest to me Solely, duly, dreary to me Drink my beer O dearest to me Only truly dearest to me Wearily, surely lie to me 'Miry, and seeking surest of me Only truly dearest to me Solely, duly, dreary of me
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: PoopyGonzales]
#19907311 - 04/27/14 01:39 PM (9 years, 8 months ago) |
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As the wind unfurls Huddled on mast this treetop One floats to the moon
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I go, ego, I go, we all go! This Piety-Identity Chipped, but yet still chortled, Indemnified the first stones.
Paved in iridescence, and Caged in Hell (Happier memories)
Disgraced in harmony, empty white shells Moving roves of eyes Seeking nothing, reaping remains of truth Listless calm, breathing night sky, Unveiling Death, alone in a shadow of the mind Waking dim dreamless nightmare neverending and winding Winding Winking Smiling Seeking nothing in the remains of a sheltered hope
Regret fawning petty-worthy Decadence petty-mighty consciousness
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: elasticaltiger]
#19926174 - 05/01/14 10:59 AM (9 years, 8 months ago) |
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that's a good one.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Turtletotem] 1
#20322370 - 07/24/14 05:09 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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dude, your shit was keen, and i'm not just saying that. i found it more poetic then alot of poems. the crows (deaths bird) eating from the Earth. Symbolism for humans?
anyways, too bad i couldn't read it in your Scandinavian tongue. i bet it sounds beautiful as is, too.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Icyus]
#20322397 - 07/24/14 05:17 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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thank you for the correction. (didn't realize it was Dutch honestly; the translator didn't say what the language was) sorry Turtletotem for the mistake
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Icyus]
#20322508 - 07/24/14 05:36 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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i think sufficient ego has been planted with good seeds, today. oh and i just really don't like messing up languages because they deserve our respect. keeping an eye out for me, you son of crabapple!1
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Icyus]
#20322539 - 07/24/14 05:42 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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i hear ya man. people take shit way too seriously sometimes. i mean, about HOW people are talking. i might get a chin up for some things people say, but not about HOW they say it. that is just stupid to do.
but ya, know, i am just in a really good mood today. got my new Camera today, so yeah, i'm just in a especially receptive mood right now.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Turtletotem]
#20326656 - 07/25/14 12:08 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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i have been reading poetry and about poetry for only about a year now... but, yeah, you got some "goods" i think, if you know what i mean.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Icyus]
#20327258 - 07/25/14 02:51 PM (9 years, 6 months ago) |
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impecable rhythm.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20895716 - 11/27/14 03:21 AM (9 years, 2 months ago) |
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s1- innocence lost (direct nod to "paradise lost" nicely done)/wolflike and unknown
s2- the undercurrent of unconscious perceptions leading us/and the wall to lean on which protects us
s3- unconsciousness/dreams/memory
s4- letting go/becoming
this is what i took from those beautiful stanzas. i hope i wasn't too far off, but damn, that was very beautifully written. and it all connects wonderfully too. nice juxtaposition in concepts, and good open endedness. i won't say "contradictory", in regards to it's meaning; not to be confused as saying it's "wrong" or anything. but that's what i mean, by open endedness; which is alot of the time good for poetry. it just means your poem is being honest.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20895721 - 11/27/14 03:27 AM (9 years, 2 months ago) |
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i'm glad you wrote it! poems man, it's all connections. intricate connections. that's why i love it. (alot of good poets be postin' )
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S3 also has a double meaning...for fun. It wasnt really intended, but after reading a mckenna book(true hallucinations) he had a passage where he talked about mushrooms under the moonlight looking like spaceships lol. It fits
something out of nothing, like Mushrooms, and dreams! 
connections
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20895742 - 11/27/14 03:44 AM (9 years, 2 months ago) |
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also excellently written. i like that the refrain of the juxtaposing elements each stanza is describing the lines. i especially like "in the distance, fading sound: run hide seek found"
that speaks to my intrigue about sound and it's qualities. (i think the properties [to be specific] of sound may be one of the fundamentals of the universe of existence; but i'm generally )
... this poem reminds me also of the saying, "it's better to have loved then to have never have loved at all", and a yearning. 
PS: ya, i know, i probably don't have to critique everything. Jesus, this is why i need weed.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20895768 - 11/27/14 04:17 AM (9 years, 2 months ago) |
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it was well worth it
the guy with the pipe is the Thought Adjuster
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: mikeisapro]
#20954716 - 12/09/14 08:01 PM (9 years, 1 month ago) |
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mostly, yeah.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20963564 - 12/11/14 07:41 PM (9 years, 1 month ago) |
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Masked said:


but i still liked yours though, Masked. it stands out.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: Masked]
#20963763 - 12/11/14 08:18 PM (9 years, 1 month ago) |
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yeah, well, THAT (the time it takes) certainly doesn't show, but the source of your poetry certainly shines through.
i find alot of these poems in here are Light Poetry, and i just can't take them very seriously, for the most part. your's, however, clearly have a point of origin that is of a more serious nature.
i should post more here, but, i don't know when and what poems i might want to possibly publish one day, so... i don't put them up.
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: B0b0] 1
#21123639 - 01/15/15 02:59 AM (9 years, 15 days ago) |
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it's like a some lovage Genesis life poem about sex and the beginning of time.
i like it 
the elements really are visualized well, to, to make this... galactic birth, come together, it seems to me.
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nice.
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#21339908 - 02/27/15 07:27 PM (8 years, 10 months ago) |
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this is my nonsense sound poem that i made as a joke. enjoy
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Re: The Official Post Your Own Poetry Thread. [Re: akira_akuma]
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akira_akuma said: this is my nonsense sound poem that i made as a joke. enjoy
i'm so glad someone actually downloaded this. LOL, i had fun making it.
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